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Bill Charles
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0 posted 2002-01-08 03:31 PM


“RAIN AND I”
by
Bill Charles
~~~~
Today when it was raining
I went for a walk,
to experience what effects
the rain would have, as
I felt its embrace…

I found a meadow and stood
there surrounded by its
peacefulness, the rain
drenched me with its kisses,
as it ran down my face…

I felt it flow over my eyes,
it touched my lips and I
discovered it felt like
your kisses, warm, moist,
and full of discovery…

So I let it caress me,
as you have done so many
times, and I knew the
rain and I had discovered
each other intimately,
the same way we did,
last night…
~~~~


© Copyright 2002 Bill Charles - All Rights Reserved
Hypnosis
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1 posted 2002-01-08 03:33 PM


Oh Bill this is so sweet.  I liked the way you compared raindrops to that of your love.  This was a wonderful poem Bill, great job!

    Randy Meador

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Victoria
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2 posted 2002-01-08 03:35 PM


lovely images bill of you walking in the rain..walking in the rain or the snow is more beautiful when in love..

             ~Vic

"To love and be loved is to feel the sun from both sides."
~ David Viscott


                                            


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3 posted 2002-01-08 04:14 PM




(sigh) You are soooooooo romantic, sweet friend, this is such a beautiful moist vision of loves caresses! (big hugggsssss) May she forever kiss your heart, pattering your heart with drops of heavens rain! We all love you so much, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Bill, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Kethry
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4 posted 2002-01-08 04:21 PM


Bill,
It's strange, rain is usually associated with sorrow but you have made it a thing of joy and wondrous beauty.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Soleil Noir
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5 posted 2002-01-08 04:23 PM



The metaphors would soak
through any skin to reach
the soul...

well done.

Silver Streak
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6 posted 2002-01-08 04:32 PM


Hi Bill!

Your poem is beautiful. You remind me of the following scripture: "When a king's face brightens, it means life; his favor is like a rain cloud in spring." NIV Proverbs 15:16
-newell

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7 posted 2002-01-08 05:09 PM


enjoyed
Marsha
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8 posted 2002-01-08 06:54 PM


Bill darling boy have you any idea how utterly wonderful this poem is? How it flows over the  page like a soft caress? How sensuous and delicate is it's touch like rain falling like crystal tears of joy. it would be difficult to pick a line or two, it was difficult to pick a verse but these two fairly call me
  

I felt it flow over my eyes,
it touched my lips and I
discovered it felt like
your kisses, warm, moist,
and full of discovery…

So I let it caress me,
as you have done so many
times, and I knew the
rain and I had discovered
each other intimately,
the same way we did,
last night


That is pure poetry, truly exceptional work, you are an absolutely brilliant darling boy utterly wonderful. This is a keeper for certain. Into my library with you.


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy



To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1


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9 posted 2002-01-08 07:36 PM


Delicate and sweet, as love should always be.  
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10 posted 2002-01-08 08:04 PM


Just lovely. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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11 posted 2002-01-08 08:08 PM


When you can combine love, nature and the affects, it is indeed poetry....you are such a poet dear sir....you know I love this...and felt that rain....


Lauren~

Tomorrow's another day
and I'm thirsty any way
so bring on the rain

Startime
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12 posted 2002-01-08 08:08 PM


*sigh* filled with tender, sensual romance. Very beautiful. I loved the feeling of it. **big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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13 posted 2002-01-08 08:12 PM


Hey Bill!!  You know I love it don't you?!
You bet....nothing like walking in the rain...or snow.  Enjoyed!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~* A dream is a wish your heart makes... *~

Fallon
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14 posted 2002-01-08 11:03 PM


I adore the rain, even in the cold. Nothing  like it.

'A word is dead when it is said, some say.
I say it just begins to live that day.'
~Emily Dickenson

Larry C
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15 posted 2002-01-08 11:22 PM


Bill,
I'm with Lauren on this one! Wow...I really like this.

JamesMichael
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16 posted 2002-01-08 11:25 PM


This is perfect Bill...one of my favorites...James
Ivy Rose
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17 posted 2002-01-08 11:26 PM


GREAT COMPARISON!!!! The misty moistness of the rain so like your beloved's kiss...

***Ivy Rose

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18 posted 2002-01-09 05:13 PM


*wow* what a marvelous piece....LOVE IT!!

Charisma

~*Theresia~*  

Marsha
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19 posted 2002-01-09 09:45 PM


Bill darling boy I'm giving this an unashamed bump it's too good to disappear too quickly

Wonderfully descriptive writing

sooooooooo very very good

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

     
  



To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1

[This message has been edited by Marsha (01-09-2002 09:47 PM).]

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