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True Reflections
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0 posted 01-08-2002 10:32 AM       View Profile for True Reflections   Email True Reflections   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for True Reflections

This is a series of 6 - 4 line stories about inhumanity and an attempt to weave them into a central theme.


O
sama Bin Laden, What have you done? Death is the legacy you leave.
Geared for a battle that cannot be won. In terror is what you believe.
Once stood two towers of nations worldwide.  Now lies a tomb for the dead.
Doomed is your soul for the devil is inside. Innocent blood has been shed.
When two lost souls did conspire, to get revenge on certain ones,
Each in trench coat, opened fire, and rocked the town of Littleton.
An innocence we thought there had been, ended April 99,
Remember the teacher and twelve children, who met their death at Columbine.
Every soldier thinks his mission, justifies the lives he takes,
Kill them all is his decision, as he starts his own earthquake.
If one you love dies, what bad luck, a daycare there, oh what a pity
Lucifer pulled up in his truck, and murdered Oklahoma City.
Lord, have mercy on those chosen, born into the Jewish race,
Innocents by train were motioned, to this concentrated place.
Nazi camps fed Hitler's Holocaust, chambers filled with cyanide,
Germany, see what you've lost, three million of your children died.
Civil unrest stirred emotions, causing all to choose their side,
Honor, death and true devotion, making up their soldier's pride
Into history marched the legions, cries of anguish still are heard,
Lost to mothers, 50,000, on the fields of Gettysburg.
Dropped from the sky on a Monday morning, August 6th, 1945,
Released from Enola without a warning, 200,000 would lose their lives.
Etched on this city a permanent memory, brought by birth of a second sun,
Now, hell has released its fury, "Oh my God! What have we done?"  




Roger


[This message has been edited by True Reflections (01-09-2002 11:36 AM).]

© Copyright 2002 Roger Long - All Rights Reserved
Mother_Earth
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1 posted 01-08-2002 12:19 PM       View Profile for Mother_Earth   Email Mother_Earth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mother_Earth

True Reflections, oh, what you have said  and the way you said is beautiful even though the subject is terrible.  What a great way to get all of these in one poem.  I hope you get a lot of replies for this because you deserve it.  Great work!   ME
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2 posted 01-08-2002 12:38 PM       View Profile for His Poet   Email His Poet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for His Poet

Roger, How terrific it is to find your work here. This is great as most of yours are. Enjoyed this although the truth is painful. Cheryl
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3 posted 01-08-2002 12:45 PM       View Profile for amusemi   Email amusemi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for amusemi

Beautifully done.  I agree, I hope many read this and respond.  It is a worthwhile piece and your point is not only well expressed, but very true.  So many lives, enough tears to fill an ocean.  I want to cry.
Madame Chipmunk
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This is absolutely the truth, Roger...and you have brought it to us in a beautiful form.
Its so good to see your talant back here again...especially with a poem of such importance, and done so very well as an acrostic.
I have missed you.  Please keep posting here.
         

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

True Reflections
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5 posted 01-08-2002 12:59 PM       View Profile for True Reflections   Email True Reflections   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for True Reflections

Mother,
Thank you for the kind words. I posted poems a while back, but wasn't receiving any responses, so I stopped. Lyra (Madame Chipmunk) convinced me to try one more. I enjoy meeting other poets, so I hope I get some responses also.

Cheryl,
I was surprised to see you here and just responded to your tin man poem this morning. Excellent as usual and now expected. Thanks for reading my poem.

Amusemi,
I split the poem into 4 line segments and tried to tell each story while showing that it is never ok to kill children. The people that do it have no justification. Thank you for taking the time to let me know how you feel.

Lyra,
You are my inspiration (but not for this particular poem). I was concerned that people would see the poem start with Osama Bin Laden and decide they were tired of that topic. See, I do have a serious side buried down in there somewhere.  
Ocelot
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Wow, this is a heart wrencher...thank you for this, even if it is such an incredibly disturbing subject.  Kudos,

+| ... Ocelot ... |+
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This give me chills and brings tears.
You have said all truths.
It's a sign of the times, as is told in the Bible.
Thank you for this.

Deb
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8 posted 01-08-2002 01:58 PM       View Profile for Marsha   Email Marsha   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marsha's Home Page   View IP for Marsha

Roger darling boy welcome back kid, I've missed you, the site has missed you, your friends have missed you, and OH have I missed you. (I know I've missed you twice as much)

Now on to the poem, darling boy THIS is utterly utterly outstanding writing. As always YOU'VE wrtten the clear and stunning truth. Your words are always shining examples of truth, this time they are utterly utterly stunning



Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy



To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1

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You have portrayed a very
chilling acrostic....of life.

This could not have been easy
for you.
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(tears fall down my cheeks) Oh my gosh, this is terribly heartbreaking but so well-written, dearest Roger, I too cry to envision all the acts of enormity throughout the course of history and praying with all my heart that we may learn from all of this and work together to establish harmony from hope and love one another. (sad sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, all our prayers join yours, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Roger, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton
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Roger,
when you pen, even words of doom; you do it with such clarity of thought and power that one can't help but listen.

Welcome back sweet poet!
Keth

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown


Ven
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12 posted 01-09-2002 09:01 AM       View Profile for Ven   Email Ven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ven

So very though provoking, an excellent write and very cleverly done. I could'nt agree more, that no action can ever justify the death of the innocents.
Thankyou so much for sharing this.
Blessed be,
Ven.
True Reflections
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13 posted 01-09-2002 09:20 AM       View Profile for True Reflections   Email True Reflections   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for True Reflections

Ocelot,
It is definitely a heart-wrenching topic. I learned a lot when I was researching the various topics. Our cruelty seems boundless.
Thanks for commenting and taking the time to read it through.

Blooming Rose,
I believe we are in the end-times also, but many signs still need to be fulfilled before the Lord cleans up this mess. There are still a lot of great things in this world. Thank You.

Marsha,
Do you have a vat of mushy stuff that you dish out to all your friends? I'll take all that I can get. Who is this 'Big Ben' guy I've heard that you English ladies like to make time with?

Soleil Noir,
The research into the Holocaust and the Atom Bomb were very difficult. All those children.
Taught me a few things that I didn't know and wish we could learn from. Thank you for dropping in.

Mistletoe Angel,
One would have to be made of stone to not be affected by the horror we cast upon our human brothers and sisters. Would make it hard to look God in the eyes. Thank you.

Kethry,
You are too kind. Are all women in Victoria as wonderful as you? I just saw a documentary on Ayers Rock. I bet if we put that in America, we could have it covered in graffiti in hours. Love ya my little saucy Aussie.

Ven,
It's amazing how we de-value life when it isn't someone we know. Last night they were celebrating how great it was that only one American soldier had died in the fighting and how that was an acceptable number. Then they showed his picture. Didn't seem so acceptable at that moment, but the military man never stopped smiling. Wonder what the soldiers family thought of the death count. I'll get off my soap box now. Thanks for responding.  

Roger

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In response to your response, I have to say my initial reaction to your first line was exactly what you said...Bin Laden, here we go again...but you know what?  I kept reading and now Im thinking that the reason things like this keep happening is due to an attitude like Ive let my self slide into.  I love the line:

Every soldier thinks his mission, justifies the lives he takes

Isn't that true.  Whenever someone dies, 1 person or 50,000...

Thanks for the truth today.  You've given me something to think about.
angelbear
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15 posted 01-09-2002 09:55 AM       View Profile for angelbear   Email angelbear   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angelbear

I am just in total agreement. This is a great expression of what many feel.

I can't control
my destiny
I trust my soul,
my only goal
is just to "be"
-Lyrics from RENT

True Reflections
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16 posted 01-09-2002 11:31 AM       View Profile for True Reflections   Email True Reflections   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for True Reflections

Apachecat906,
Originally the poem didn't have the first 4 lines. I added those a couple of months ago. I had hoped the poem would never grow larger, but mankind had a different plan.
Thanks for giving it a chance. I'm not a radical that thinks we should never fight back when it is justified, but I feel for the innocents that live or die with our decisions.

angelbear,
Some feel that war is a necessary evil that we need to cleanse the world of humanity, like a fire in the forest, destroys to rebuild. I'm sad that it is the way we have chosen to settle our differences. We go to the lowest common denominator and start subtracting from both sides. Thank you for your comments.

Roger

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Another ride to the top for this amazing poem, Roger.  

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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18 posted 01-09-2002 12:36 PM       View Profile for sodpossom   Email sodpossom   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sodpossom

Very beautiful and well done!
amigo
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19 posted 01-09-2002 12:40 PM       View Profile for amigo   Email amigo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for amigo

Very well said, Roger....I wonder how many more wake-up calls we need, to know why we are all here for...sets me thinking...thank you for sharing...
heather_kitn
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20 posted 01-09-2002 01:15 PM       View Profile for heather_kitn   Email heather_kitn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for heather_kitn

Simply amazing...no words of encouragement or praise would do this piece justice.  Only quiet reflection by all who read it.

VERY well penned!

-heather

I do not seek...I find!
           ~Picasso~

True Reflections
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21 posted 01-09-2002 01:38 PM       View Profile for True Reflections   Email True Reflections   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for True Reflections

Lyra,
All that money I paid you to keep me on top was worth it. Thanks for the push.

Stevie,
Thanks for reading this again. I left for awhile, but Lyra made me come back. You know how persuasive she can be. I didn't stand a chance.

Amigo,
I think the wake-up calls are getting later and later, like the sunshine in an Alaskan winter. Pretty soon we won't wake up at all or we'll be afraid to go to sleep. Thank you for the comments.

Heather Kitn,
Thank you. I commented on one of yours earlier and see we have a similar style. I'm going to have to do something lighter on my next post. Maybe double my Prozac intake tomorrow and mellow out.

Roger

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22 posted 01-09-2002 02:05 PM       View Profile for N orth Carolina Girl   Email N orth Carolina Girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for N orth Carolina Girl

Roger,this is so sad but heartfelt.I always love your poetry and this is one of your best.





Juanita

"always have a smile on your face it makes people wonder what you`re up to:

True Reflections
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23 posted 01-09-2002 02:52 PM       View Profile for True Reflections   Email True Reflections   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for True Reflections

Juanita,
Thank you and I appreciate the compliment. I like this poem very much, but it is very depressing. I completely changed the focus of it after doing the research. It hit home that the children and people in other countries around the world feel, love and hurt just like we do in the USA. I think we have a tendency to de-value the lives of people we don't identify with or normally interact with. This is wrong.

Roger

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Very thoughtful write, Roger.  Talent with a message...enjoyed!
 
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