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ecrivan
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0 posted 2002-01-08 12:36 PM



See the summits above
of a world throbbing beneath
air currents meet between
half god's children lying asleep.

Rows of cotton cloud keep us shielded
from the discovery of an eternity
Why are we on this gigantic rotisserie?
with questions like these?

I'm unappeased by the temporary;
the beige desert sand
stripped of life
clouds that float into sight,
the events following a torrential rain
when parched soil opens her hugh drain.

Rocky canyons so patiently eroded
as I live in a humble abode,
there are so many truths untold
so much to repeat
so much again to unfold,
as seen from up above.


© Copyright 2002 Martin Dansky - All Rights Reserved
peppermint35
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1 posted 2002-01-08 01:28 AM


Wow!!  I think that's a bit below my ability for expressing myself, but this exploded inside my mind.

You surely have a way with words, kind sir.. and making one think..

Pepper
"A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth."
   Percy Bysshe Shelley

vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...
2 posted 2002-01-09 04:14 AM



ecrivan-
   Very powerful writing here...I enjoyed this.
   Hugs,
   ~Vicky


"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

ecrivan
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3 posted 2002-01-10 12:42 PM


thankyou Peppermint and Vicky for your feedback


N orth Carolina Girl
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4 posted 2002-01-10 10:46 AM


Martin,this of course was very good.Its a little beyond my little mind but I sure enjoyed it.



Juanita

"always have a smile on your face it makes people wonder what you`re up to:

Madame Chipmunk
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5 posted 2002-01-10 09:42 PM


A maginificent description of the planet we live on, Martin....Extremely well done!

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

ecrivan
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6 posted 2002-01-10 10:18 PM


Lyra and Juanita,

I'm amazed at the artwork you are both collecting, must do a search and see for myself!Juanita your mind is not small!!

Martin


[This message has been edited by ecrivan (01-10-2002 10:19 PM).]

GenXer
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7 posted 2002-01-11 12:15 PM


Why are we on this gigantic rotisserie?

Now that is one great description of the rotating planet that we inhabit.  Very pensive write my friend.  There is so much on this earth and in nature that make us wonder and ponder what life truly means.  Very good.

Also, I have been wondering myself where those two get all there artwork.

Dave  

Kethry
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8 posted 2002-01-11 07:33 AM


ecrivan,
and yet the earth spins as the thoughts burn and churn.
Good writing
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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