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0 posted 2002-01-07 03:07 PM



Dorothy’s Tin Man

My dearest Tin Man,
Rest assured I’m on my way.
I’ve plenty of oil in this can
to soothe your pains away.

You were the caring one
as we traveled the yellow brick road.
The one who made the journey fun ~
whose kindness always showed.

Your squeaks are simply music
to these tone deaf ears of mine.
The heart of gold within you
is the treasure I long to find.

You are the finest of all men ~
so honorable and true.
I’ll never believe you’re merely tin
for my heart is drawn to you.

Like a magnet is drawn to steel
Like a moth’s drawn to a flame
I’m drawn to your heart of gold
No tin heart could do the same

Dorothy

Cheryl McClellan
1/07/2002


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N orth Carolina Girl
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1 posted 2002-01-07 03:14 PM


Cheryl,I know Dave is going to love this.My favorite charactor in the Wizard of Oz was the scarecrow.I guess because he was clumpsy.




Juanita

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2 posted 2002-01-07 03:30 PM


His Poet,

   Awwwwww ..... I love this! Not only because it is sooo sweet.. but I loveeeee the Wizard Of Oz Very enjoyable read.

Hugs,
Tara

"My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read"
     - Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

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3 posted 2002-01-07 03:57 PM


Juanita, so glad you liked this. I loved his poem and thought this would be a neat follow up. Thanks for reading. Cheryl
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4 posted 2002-01-07 03:59 PM


Tara, Who doesn't love the Wizard of Oz? I'm so glad you enjoyed this. It's in response to another great poem on this site called Emotional Atrophy. Thanks for reading. Cheryl
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5 posted 2002-01-07 06:33 PM


Cheryl darling girl Dave's poem was wonderful your follow up is divine. I love it Love it LOVE IT

As always You shine, as a moth to a flame you are drawn to beauty and you pen it sooooooooooo well

Absolutely excellent writing. I caught a flash of this and was determined to hunt for it. And having found it I'm putting you in my library, where all the best poets are.
Dave, Juanita, Lyra, Stevie, Keth, Bill, 'Deer, SEA, Pepper, Kari Margie ......... Sven, Magnus, Larry, ........and on and on. Wonderful company I keep don't you think?

Fabulous writing darling girl absolutely fabulous

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy



To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1


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6 posted 2002-01-07 08:18 PM


This is so precious, Cheryl...I just know that Dave will adore it.
Great writing!   
                          

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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7 posted 2002-01-07 10:12 PM


"Your squeaks are simply music
to these tone deaf ears of mine.
The heart of gold within you
is the treasure I long to find."

That is wonderful! Good poem, with a loving and tender message.


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8 posted 2002-01-08 10:47 AM


Marsha, your wonderful words bowl me over. I'm blushing and thrilled to be in your library. So glad you liked. Cheryl
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9 posted 2002-01-08 10:49 AM


Lyra, Thanks for reading this. I hope Dave gets a chance to see it and enjoys it too. I loved his poem and this just fell into place. Cheryl
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10 posted 2002-01-08 10:51 AM


Midnitesun, Thank you for taking time to read and reply. I'm glad you liked this. Cheryl
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11 posted 2002-01-08 10:59 AM


Cheryl - Very well written.  The flow is superb, and the subject is consistent.
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12 posted 2002-01-08 11:09 AM


Cheryl,
If I only had a brain, or courage, I could write poetry this good. I think it's these darn red shoes. They are too distracting. I'm even starting to see flying monkeys. Oh well, time to hit the bricks again.

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13 posted 2002-01-09 10:14 PM


Dorothy, I mean Cheryl.  This is a great response to my poem.  I really enjoyed the whole thing.  Now I expect you to mail Dorothy with that can of oil to me within 10 to 14 days, no more.lol

Dave

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14 posted 2002-01-10 10:49 AM


Dave, Dorothy's been in Tin Man's heart the entire time. He just didn't know it. As for you dear friend, I mailed a can of WD-40 today. Look for it. Cheryl
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15 posted 2002-01-11 06:52 AM


Dorothy,
you knocked the stuffing out of me with this write. I thought I was your true love.
the scarecrow.

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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16 posted 2002-01-11 11:02 AM


Scare Crow, You know I love you like a brother. Can't we just be friends? Every place you hang out is so corny. I'm a city girl at heart. Best wishes, Dorothy
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