Memories of Loss (Inspired by SEA)

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Mac Attack
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since 2001-12-12

Posts 100
Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2002-01-06 10:54 PM

Silent moments, filled with sound
My mind roars in memory.
My love for you knew no bounds,
My thoughts of you with me.

Pride I took and nursed within,
To see you brightly gleam.
I willingly embraced that sin,
No hope for me it would seem.

My boasting would not abate,
Arrogance swelling my head.
I took risks I knew were too great,
The results I did not enough dread.

Long gone you are, along with my love
Time and age have changed us two.
Only dim memories remain my Dove,
As ethereal as a new summers dew.

But when reminded of you,
Those memories take hold of me,
I sigh and shed a tear or two,
For my lost schooner, in the sea.

(This is in response to a post by SEA, which inspired a seed of thought… )

Mac

RosePetal

Member Elite

since 2001-08-26

Posts 2985
South Florida

1 posted 2002-01-06 10:59 PM

I really like this Mac. It's good to see you being inspired by SEA, shes's great.
It just makes me think...sometimes no matter how much you love someone it just isn't enough for them. Great Write

RP

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2002-01-06 11:41 PM

not fair, you didn't warn me.....now I'm in need of tissues....this is so perfect. I am so happy to have inspired you some

I am keeping this treasure

"...and she swears there's nothing wrong
I hear her playin that same ol song"~Fuel~Bad Day

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

3 posted 2002-01-07 12:07 PM

mac,
You got SEA. Good job! I like this.

ecrivan
Member Elite

since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

4 posted 2002-01-07 12:08 PM

a love at sea it seems, memories of love lost is tough..you might want to reduce the use of reverse syntax, I am trying to do the same, so the rhyme would proceed more naturally? just a thought. this is a lovely write

[This message has been edited by ecrivan (01-07-2002 12:11 AM).]

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

5 posted 2002-01-07 12:33 PM

(sigh) So so sad, sweet friend, it too can be bothersome to try and love someone and they never feel like you want them to and are never satisfied! (sad sigh) So sad but beautiful, sweet friend, Susan is such a wonderful person and an angel to us all just as you are! (big hugggsssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Mac, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

N orth Carolina Girl
Senior Member

since 2001-12-04

Posts 962
NC,USA

6 posted 2002-01-07 06:28 AM

Mac,this was truly beautiful and sad.I lost my brother 5 years ago this March.It does get easier but a part of my heart will always be gone.

Juanita

"always have a smile on your face it makes people wonder what you`re up to:

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

7 posted 2002-01-07 08:34 PM

shameless *bump*

BTTT!

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

8 posted 2002-01-07 08:44 PM

A beautiful love poem, Mac.

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

9 posted 2002-01-07 08:50 PM

Way to go Mac...I think you did it right..

Mac Attack
Member

since 2001-12-12

Posts 100
Ontario, Canada

10 posted 2002-01-07 08:57 PM

I can't begin to express how much your responses to this humble poem have ment to me. Thank you all so very much,
Mac

[This message has been edited by Mac Attack (01-07-2002 08:57 PM).]

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