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The Note
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The Note |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
I read the note that said you were gone and in that moment, died the remains of the song A song which we danced, to the tune of our hearts the smiles we gave, pierced through with love’s darts My thoughts did turn to the sun in your hair the flash of the eyes, as you said you care A touch on your cheek slid like silk so fine a portrait of beauty drawn with artist line With a sigh, I read we could be friends if in the future, we could make amends Slowly I put the note away knowing there could be nothing left to say Time went by, with an aching heart until one day, I realized with a start The face was blurred when brought to mind for time has a way of becoming kind So the note became dry and crumbled to dust I stopped hanging on, as I knew I must For out in the world would be someone new and life only gives to the ones that pursue |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yes as time passes by we eventually figure this out..James |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
It is wonderful how the old adages have great truth in them; is it not? Time does, indeed, heal wounds.. I liked the way I felt the anguish and then ... as distanced by time, the return of hope ... Good one, a keeper  Pepper |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Time went by, with an aching heart until one day, I realized with a start The face was blurred when brought to mind for time has a way of becoming kind ========================================== anyone ever tell you ... your rhymes divine ... are easy on the mind.  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Interesting, as Spancil Hill played in the background, to click on this, and although you borrowed not one word from that, these words fit the music perfectly. Bravo! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Within us all is a piece of every person we know. 'Tis kept safely tucked away, cherished. Such longing to bring them back, such love at what they left us with. Time does heal the pain, thank goodness. Well done dear Logan.... soft smile and a gentle hug, Nancy. ~* A dream is a wish your heart makes... *~ |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
"life only gives to the ones that pursue" i hope this is true...helen |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Logan, this is so so sad but beautiful, time will always ease the hurt and answers will be found to ensure love and sweetness to follow! (big hugggsssss) Sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Logan, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
I love the way you have written this. Both the message, and the words and rhythm you have used to convey those thoughts. and life only gives to the ones that pursue That line is so very, very true. Too many people expect life to come to them, but the ones who truly get all out of life, are those who pursue what they want If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Sad, but sweetly written as always with a gentle hand. And the face may blur, but the soul remains memorable throughout time. smiles to you, gentle poet. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Logan,  enjoyed the read. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Very sad but so well written Logan. ~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Logan~ This one IS a 'keeper' ... but, isn't that the way it is with those in the know~  'I stopped hanging on, as I knew I must For out in the world would be someone new and life only gives to the ones that pursue' Oh ... what wisdom in your thoughts sweet man~ This is among my favorites of yours~  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy |
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Mac Attack Member
since 2001-12-12
Posts 100Ontario, Canada |
Nicely done! I loved how this ended with hope. Thanks, Mac |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Logan, Wow...this is really good. Great truth, great poem! |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
So true Logan...it is easier for some than others i guess..nicely one...enjoyed.. ~Victoria~ "To love and be loved is to feel the sun from both sides." |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
....and pursue we must, very well done.... this hits very close to home for me |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Sometimes the pain leaves us not wanting to try again for fear of being hurt again....to pursue love one has to be able to trust. Your poem speaks of your healing and has ended on a very positive note for you..Very well written with a great message for us all. **big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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