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Master
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0 posted 2002-01-06 01:18 AM


My father-protector,
I accepted my fate,
Gave the scepter away like a gift undeserved,
Turned away from the throne, threw my thoughts to the winds…
An obedient servant, I continued to serve!
O, forgive me my sins!

On your throne,
He descended like a crow on the cross
And transgressed in your dress, -- all his flaws were exposed.
He defiled your life with his filth, with his lies…
Those incestuous sheets! O, those mischievous eyes!
How they lied in your bed!
How they laughed at my loss!

And an heir to the throne,
I ripped out my hair!
No one thought I would dare, but I dared daring death.
Couldn’t bare all this hate so I bared it at him!
Bared my teeth like a dog at the beast in the snare,
Looked him straight in the eye as I inhaled his breath,
And I watched as he shivered like a sheep from the scare.

My father-protector,
I walked in your steps,
Put my life on the line, -- on the blade of a sword,
Met my foe in discord, overflowing with strife,--
But I gave you my word that I’d get my revenge,
And I bought this revenge with the price of my life.



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EagleScorpion
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1 posted 2002-01-06 01:33 AM


revenge.. what a cruel thing to have to feel. It's sad.. it's a deadly sin, a deadly sin.
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2 posted 2002-01-06 05:00 PM



Hamlet, indeed.  An interesting take and appeasing write!  Well done!

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3 posted 2002-01-06 09:22 PM




(big hugggsssssss) BRAVO!!! Oh my gosh, you portray the archetype and element of revenge sooooo wonderfully in this emotional poem as like Hamlet said, your words are alays so beautifully inventive! I love it, I pray too that this anger will be resolved with peace and understanding and love! (sad sigh) My heart goe sout to you, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Andrey, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

ecrivan
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4 posted 2002-01-06 09:28 PM


Master,

Nicely done.All too familar with Hamlet's musing of when he should kill the king, and how he expressed discord with his 'new parents'. Will be performing it in Montreal next month, I as Polonius, the guy who didn't want to give his daughter up to him.


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5 posted 2002-01-06 09:44 PM


*sigh* so filled with emotion and revenge....you paint the feelings so well in this poem. Very well written..I was feeling the sense of revenge myself as I read this poem. **big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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6 posted 2002-01-06 10:41 PM


yes, further insight to one of the great characters of life. . .

you've shown another side that I really never thought of here. . . the loss, the regret. . . yes. . . well done. . .

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