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Eternal Damage (repost from open 16)
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Eternal Damage (repost from open 16) |
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RosePetal 
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida 
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Regret runs through me Trickling inside my veins Throbbing muscles become inflamed My eyes, dark and wet with the agony they dwell Your eyes burn flesh Like flames of hell  Temperature sky-rocketing Pulsating arteries about to burst Wild animal hunger Un-quenchable thirst Nineteen year old body In perfect state upon arrival Breakdown on it's horizon Strenth engulfs me for survival You remain a bad omen that struck like lightning bolts Damn near marinated me Those high wattage volts Good always outdoes Evil Unlike movies, I have no energy to relive a sequel |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
RP this is outstanding I could feel the anger and the temperature from here. A write like that is ideal for getting the pain out. Truly awesome Write on and I hope you're on the road to heaven now.   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Soooooooo emotionally intense, sweet friend, I'm so happy that this feeling no longer applies to you now, but if anything ever upsets me, I'm always here for you, love! (kiss on lips) I love you, sweet friend! (kiss on lips) You have such a beautiful heart, my love, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Joanna...let there be no doubt that herein lies a very strong message...Yipes...glad it is not me...Nicely done |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
You remain a bad omen that struck like lightning bolts Damn near marinated me Those high wattage volts Wow. I am glad to see that there will be no sequel. Sounds like it was definitely a painful experience. The poem definitely captures that with your clever use of metaphors. Nicely done. Dave |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Joanna.....All I have to say about this one is WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Very beautifully written, but just a but too hot to handle for an old lady like me!  copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Oh you sweet thing! I won't let you burn!!!!! Kathleen-- |
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Mac Attack Member
since 2001-12-12
Posts 100Ontario, Canada |
Worth the re-post and the read! Well executed. Thanks for sharing! Mac |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Emotionally powerful.......I am glad it is in the past...**big hugs** Now you are filled with brilliant smiles. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Very strong poem. I could feel the anger, You really put it across. floria |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I too, have been venting a lot lately....its good for the soul....Peace and Hugs to you.... Lauren~ Tomorrow's another day |
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