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Open Poetry #18

Here, In the Fog

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2002-01-04 12:21 PM

it’s as if
the morning
whispers to awakening
quieted
made serene
by the heavy mist
that brushes it
to a softness
unexplainable

only that which is close
has a sharpness
of contrast
giving a longing
to this soul
to seek
the distance
where loneliness is dulled
hope more possible
tenderness gently evident

as if textured
with cottony clouds

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.
[This message has been edited by VAS (01-04-2002 06:01 PM).]

Soleil Noir
Senior Member

since 2001-12-19

Posts 688
USA

1 posted 2002-01-04 01:48 PM

Virginia, you have given this an ethereal feel, and it is quite a comforting read...thank you...

ecrivan
Member Elite

since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

2 posted 2002-01-04 01:52 PM

There is a lofty feel to this, I would add something to the last two lines though that
seem alone to me..that's just a thought. In other words if you were to complete your thought as to what is as if...in the last bit those lines would stand more complete

[This message has been edited by ecrivan (01-04-2002 01:54 PM).]

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

3 posted 2002-01-04 05:24 PM

Virginia, this is lovely. I don't understand why you don't have more replies.....it's a beautiful poem

My perception of truth will somehow never quite be the same..and so I write.

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