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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever 
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(This one is for anybody who has lost a loved one.) Did it come so easily? Because you were all I have known.. Does your heart rest peacefully? Mines damaged, how to I dont know.. But I.... Well I know... I hated the day when you had to go, I didn't say all the things that I wanted to say, and I cant take that when you're taken away. but I feel you... ohh I feel you near me... I didn't say all the things that I wanted to say, and I cant take that when you're taken away. but I feel you... ohh I feel you near me... Did it come so painfully? A lovers dance we had sown.. Why must you leave so gracefully, I'm damaged, you're all that I've known. But I.. Well I know.... Goddamnit why did you have to go?!?!? I didn't say all the things that I wanted to say, and I CANT TAKE THAT WHEN YOU'RE TAKEN AWAY but I feel you.... ooh I feel you near me... We cannot go back. Can't go back. I cant go back. I must go on... I must go on...(why?) I didn't say all the things that I wanted to say. and I cant take that when you're taken away.. but I feel you.. ohh I feel you near me. Love is God. Love is war. Love is what your life is for. |
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Virgo_Rains Member
since 2001-12-03
Posts 54Pacific Northwest, U.S.A. |
Eagle, This is sad, but yet so beautiful...it reminds me to make each day count..for all the tomorrows.. VR |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
I could feel the repetitive nature of the mind as it churns thoughts over ad over trying to grasp and reach closure. This is an extremely realistic piece and I felt it very much. Very well done!! Just believe... |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
i cannot take full credit for this, as it contains a few song lyrics from a song with the same overall message.. just thought i could stick them in a nice little poem. The song itself is so beautiful, but yes, so sad.. like the poem. Love is God. Love is war. Love is what your life is for. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I will keep this..... My perception of truth will somehow never quite be the same..and so I write. |
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RosePetal 
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
It reads like a sad song indeed. Enjoyed! RP |
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Shou-Lao Junior Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 48 |
How much of the 'song' did you use? |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
Hey guys thanks for the replies. To answer Shou-Lao's question, no i changed some things in the song, i just felt inspired by it. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Eagle Scorpion, Loved the repetition and the feel of this one Write on Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Nicely done, ES. All writing comes |
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