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Master
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since 1999-08-18
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Boston, MA

0 posted 2002-01-03 10:25 PM


Branches of tress
shed leaves.
The adulteress, autumn
hangs up the sign "we're open,
Come in, please.
Striptease."

The playful breeze
won't cease.
It spins in whirl-winds.
Shed the curtains.
foliage up to the knees --
striptease.

Dance so as not to freeze!
Do as you please.
In the golden gardens,
throw aside your garments.
It's the season's caprice,
striptease.



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[This message has been edited by Master (01-03-2002 11:15 PM).]

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EagleScorpion
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Here, Now, Forever
1 posted 2002-01-03 10:26 PM


heh heh heh.. gottta love them hooters
amusemi
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A State of Disarray
2 posted 2002-01-03 10:27 PM


Oh!  What a title tease this is, but a delightful find!!!  Great work and metaphor play.  Enjoyed...
Marge Tindal
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3 posted 2002-01-03 10:48 PM


Master~
This is just delightfully lovely~
How uniquely phrased~
Happy New Year to you, my friend~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Dusk Treader
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4 posted 2002-01-03 10:53 PM


The title was definetly enticing, (Do I have to moderate? ) LOL, but I was pleasantly surprised. Excellent poem! I loved the playful and joyous tone you gave to autumn when often it is depicted as rather depressing. I enjoyed this peace muchly, "Dance so as not to freeze!" I should take that to heart

"A hard, cold wisom is required for goodness to accomplish good. Goodness without wisdom always accomplishes evil" - Robert Heinlein

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