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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2002-01-01 12:26 PM



My Perfect Life


in my perfect life
I’ve found some imperfections
placed them all together
call them my collections
each has it’s own place
but as I look in my inspections
some cross over to others
my imperfection intersections
I inspect them all
at each and every section
they are just wild hairs
go in all directions
I know them all by heart
they are my connections
the worst of them are
attached to my affections
getting better at being alone
no one to give objections
seeing who I truly am
within my reflections

"I have already paid for all my future sins."  Sade...(King of Sorrow)

© Copyright 2002 Helen Chambers - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-01-01 12:30 PM




(smiles) Yes, yes!!! And may you always cherish the connections of your heart, for as long as you love yourself and believe in your heart, you will find true happiness and love in life! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, HAPPY NEW YEAR!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Helen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Kit McCallum
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2 posted 2002-01-01 12:52 PM


Wonderful reflections to ring in the New Year 1slicklady! I very much enjoyed your use of rhyme in this piece, very nicely done indeed!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Bill Charles
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3 posted 2002-01-01 04:37 PM


Helen - you do write with perfection, and you are an artist... I know these thoughts below, and have found them to be true...

getting better at being alone
no one to give objections
seeing who I truly am
within my reflections

BC

walker
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4 posted 2002-01-01 04:44 PM


It's hard work becoming a better human being and part of it is accepting that we cannot be perfect, how ironic! Great poem.
amusemi
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5 posted 2002-01-01 04:45 PM


They say that even  the most perfect diamond has a flaw...I think you're a gem.  This poem is flawless.  Very thought provoking work.
DonFurr
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6 posted 2002-01-01 06:38 PM


I see you are still creating beauty.

Startime
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7 posted 2002-01-01 06:44 PM


We are none of us perfect but you sure are doing a wonderful job of working on it. This poem is honest and beautiful. **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Tracey
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8 posted 2002-01-01 09:17 PM


I have reflected over much of what you write here and you are absolutely right. Even with its imperfections, I truly love my life. Like Bill, I too particularly relate to those last four lines.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Magnus
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9 posted 2002-01-01 09:20 PM


WE ALL do this...sometimes too much...I have
done this many times...What always helps me
is someone who thinks I am very special...
Their words..they keep me from doing all of
those inspections...

This was beautifully written and very honest.
That goes a long way..

Irish Rose
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10 posted 2002-01-01 09:36 PM


Helen, you ARE special believe me.

'Fiction is the truth inside the lie.' ~Stephen King

Madame Chipmunk
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11 posted 2002-01-01 10:27 PM


I love the way you used the rhyme in this piece, Helen.  It was a rather ingenius piece of perfection.   

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

vandana
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12 posted 2002-02-20 02:27 PM


enjoy your read
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