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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2002-01-01 07:48 AM



The Waiting Game

What element would bend the bough?
And sweeten the time of here and now?
What pressure would pop the cork?
Spew champagne upon the talk?

What words could weigh upon the wind
And still touch gently the thin-skinned?
What flower could fix a balm?
Without the fire of alarm

Is there such a thing as wait?
Without the sigh of that I hate.
Could there be a time of peace
Without the moment of release

Could immediate declare
I’ll wait some time it’s only fair.
Would it mar the inner ID?
The succulence of the bid

These are questions I put to thee
A form of be or not to be.



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Sunshine
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1 posted 2002-01-01 07:50 AM



Shakespeare is nodding...yes indeedy-do!

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2 posted 2002-01-01 10:50 AM


you know you like a poem when you read it more and more
and this one I did.

I am/Kathleen/

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3 posted 2002-01-01 11:31 AM


Seymour I really love this poem it is UTTERLY utterly fabulous.
I love this bit I really do
        ~~~~~~
Is there such a thing as wait?
Without the sigh of that I hate.
Could there be a time of peace
Without the moment of release

Could immediate declare
I’ll wait some time it’s only fair.

When you write love YOU write. Utterly wonderful
Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy



To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1


Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2002-01-01 11:42 AM


Sunshine,
Thank you and Shakespeare, *L*

Kathleen,
Wonderful comment, thank you, *L*

Marsha,
Thank you for the utterly. *L*

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5 posted 2002-01-01 11:42 AM


sy...you have a wonderful way with words...i do so love the way you write...helen
Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2002-01-01 11:54 AM


Helen,
And I love your answers, *L*

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7 posted 2002-01-01 12:18 PM


What manner, this you speak ...
That leaves this reader weak?

Beautiful use of vocabulary Sy ... I love the style of this, it blended perfectly into your always rhythmic flow. Much enjoyed!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 2002-01-01 12:47 PM


Kit,
Your comments are always a treat to read. *L*

Bill Charles
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9 posted 2002-01-01 05:23 PM


Seymour - sometimes I wonder about this things myself. How long does one wait?  

Is there such a thing as wait?
Without the sigh of that I hate.
Could there be a time of peace
Without the moment of release

BC


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10 posted 2002-01-01 05:50 PM


Waiting is a something I'm good at. Writing good poems is something YOU'RE good at. Enjoyed this sir.
Madame Chipmunk
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11 posted 2002-01-01 06:14 PM


Beautifully done, Seymour
I especially loved this verse

What element would bend the bough?
And sweeten the time of here and now?
What pressure would pop the cork?
Spew champagne upon the talk?

It seems especially relevant for the new year.     

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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12 posted 2002-01-01 06:29 PM


Life needs to move on......waiting too long can make us sometimes lose sight of why we are waiting. Very interesting thinking here...Very well done. Much more here then meets the eye and you say it very well. **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Seymour Tabin
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13 posted 2002-01-01 10:49 PM


Bill, Each peson is different.

Poet deVine, Thank you sweet. *L*

Madame C, Thanks for the beautifully done. *L*

Startime, Thanks for the hugs. *L*

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14 posted 2002-01-02 03:50 AM


Now you did our boy Bill proud with this one, as sometimes you wonder what on earth you were waiting for when it is all for naught.  Can you tell I liked this, yup indeedy I did!  Happy New Year to you and your family!

~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~

Seymour Tabin
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15 posted 2002-01-02 07:43 AM


Mysteria,
Happy New Year and thank you for your comment. I knew everyone would take this poem different, but I enjoyed the write. *L*

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16 posted 2002-01-03 11:54 AM


This flows so beautifully, Seymour, that William himself would be impressed! *S* suthern certainly is. *G*
Seymour Tabin
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17 posted 2002-01-03 12:35 PM


Suthern,
It's always a pleasue to see your comments.
Thank you sweet. *L*

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18 posted 2002-01-03 01:43 PM


Nice write, Sir, wish i could put the words together this way


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19 posted 2002-01-03 02:34 PM


as always a beautiful gem Sey

Charisma

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20 posted 2002-01-03 05:06 PM


Powerful thoughts, Sy. I like this, has a lot of things to mull over.
Sandra

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21 posted 2002-01-03 08:58 PM




(sigh) Desires can indeed engulf us, and have us waiting so long they bring tears to our hearts! I am reminded of a quote from Ferris Bueller's Day Off "Life goes pretty fast, if you don't stop and look around once in a while, you can miss it.". (big hugggssssss) May we seize each day with a smile, but ultimately, capture each moment with love and cheer! (sigh) You always write so wonderfully, sweet friend, we all love you so mcuh! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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22 posted 2002-01-03 09:41 PM


Shall I compare thee to a minstrel of wind
Thou art more passionate and more temperate
Rough words do shake the love from hearts
And your verse has far too short a lease in time

Not a sonnet..but from the heart.
I missed you Sy. ~Sigh..you bring forth the William in everyone.

Love
Regina

Seymour Tabin
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23 posted 2002-01-03 10:41 PM


Robert A,
You can and thank you.

Charisma,
Thanks for the gem. *L*

Sandra,
Thanks for the read. *L*

Noah,
You are right, thank you.

Rwood,
Sweet Regina, I missed you too. *L*

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