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Janet Marie
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0 posted 2002-01-01 12:06 PM



In loving memory of DeVante'...
my reason for writing ... always.

~*~


~Fragments Of Rhyme~


Whispered words wept promise ... over borrowed time,
poetic promises kept ... epitaphs engraved in endless rhyme.
Stirs of echoes taking flight ... across midnight's silver blue,
night's sky draped in a veil of stars ... moonlit in emerald hues.

Winter's white winds pirouette ... snow falls in silent silhouette,
pen in hand wrought with regret ... muted muse unable to forget.
Fragments of verse written in vain ... shadowed by sorrow's refrain,
a poet cursed in aching abstain ... the words fail but the need remains.

By candle light in late of night's spill ... impatiently praying for inspire's instill,
*You are there, yet here with me still* ... my pen's last word, my heart's until.


Janet Marie



~Whispers On The Wind~


A whispering wind blows warm
across midnight's blue frost.
And like so many times before,
I return to this sacred place
to kneel beneath my endless sky of you.
Returning to a moment engraved in time,
returning to the day where I witnessed forever.

Here, at the jade water's edge
the feathered pines, the wintered white birch,
and the heathered willows weep with me.
For they too, witnessed the glory
of your season's change.
Here, where two winters
have now come and gone,
the ground is still warm
with your presence ... as am I.

For it was here that you
braided my hair with strands of sunlight.
Here, where you turned my tears into
crystal blue butterflies
then set them free
in your breeze of forgiveness.
It was here that you made
time stand still and carried me
across the threshold of your soul
allowing me to see the world
through your emerald eyes.
In that moment born of your insight
the pearl and opaline clouds parted,
and the sapphire sky opened up
so that I could catch a glimpse
of heaven. So I could warm
in it's promise of innocence reborn.
So I would no longer be afraid
to let go of you when the time came.

And it is here that I have come again tonight,
my path illuminated by the silver iced moon.
I come to touch the traces left behind,
to inhale the inspiration
your vision left inside of me.
Sometimes, I come to scream at the stars
and cry to the sky, pleading, wondering,
where have my words gone?
Why cant I find the rhymes to define?
Why cant I still find the words to do you justice?
And it is here in this place where we touched infinite,
that I finally come to understand.

Here, you cradled my face in your hands
and the world fell away.
Here, our love for one another
rose above us and shined down
in healing rays of warmth and promise.
And in that profound moment in time
we shared the same breath ...
shared the same heart beat.
And so it should only be here
that it all becomes so clear.

You, who took my breath away
time after time. You, who breathed color
and inspiration into my muted world.
It could only be you who still
touches me in places so deep that it
takes my words away as you take my breath.

So I wont question the silence any more.
I wont scream at the stars nor cry to the sky.
I'll just lace my fingers in your memory's trace
and watch your seasons dance upon the water.
Here, I will linger in your whispering winds.
And as the stars rain down on me ...
as you turn my tears into poetry,
I breathe again in the quiet comfort
of knowing that when I need you the most,
just like tonight ...
you will come and touch down again.


Janet Marie


~*~ ~*~ ~*~

2 years ago tonight ... my butterfly took merciful flight.
I love you Vante' forever ... and then more.


~*~  ~*~ ~*~

In the time we've known
That we each are a part of one another
We've lost as much as we have won
And as our lives have grown
We have found that it only brings us pain
To hang on to the things that we have done ...
Still I love ... the times you've come

~Jackson Browne~

~*~

*thank you to Lady In White for the phrase*  



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1 posted 2002-01-01 12:14 PM



If I just said "yes", would you understand?

Yes...

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2 posted 2002-01-01 12:18 PM


So I wont question the silence any more.
I wont scream at the stars nor cry to the sky.
I'll just lace my fingers in your memory's trace
and watch your seasons dance upon the water.
Here, I will linger in your whispering winds.
And as the stars rain down on me ...
as you turn my tears into poetry,
I breathe again in the quiet comfort
of knowing that when I need you the most,
just like tonight ...
you will come and touch down again.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
May God Bless you Janet.....
and, a Happy New Year.
~Warm hugs, Nancy~

*~ Wishing everyone a New Year filled with Peace & Love ~*

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3 posted 2002-01-01 12:19 PM


Bravo......Bravo......

I am/Kathleen/

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4 posted 2002-01-01 12:19 PM


You've brought a tear to my eye Janet, you take care my friend!

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5 posted 2002-01-01 12:35 PM


Janet Marie...My heart has no words to reply...but you know.  
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6 posted 2002-01-01 12:37 PM


"Winter's white winds pirouette ... snow falls in silent silhouette,
pen in hand wrought with regret ... muted muse unable to forget."

"It was here that you made
time stand still and carried me
across the threshold of your soul
allowing me to see the world
through your emerald eyes."

"You, who took my breath away
time after time. You, who breathed color
and inspiration into my muted world.
It could only be you who still
touches me in places so deep that it
takes my words away as you take my breath."

"I'll just lace my fingers in your memory's trace
and watch your seasons dance upon the water.
Here, I will linger in your whispering winds.
And as the stars rain down on me ...
as you turn my tears into poetry,"

Oh dearest JM ... you gave this old heart a tender hug tonight, as a tear blurred the lines of these tender, sweet words. You write of your love in such breathtaking beauty ... I am in sheer awe at the power behind the words that flow from your heart and pen. Please know that I am thinking of you ... and DeVante tonight, and my thoughts are with you sweet poet. These were a marvelous tribute to your love, and to DeVante's inspiration to you, and ultimately ... to us, for we benefit by the beauty that shines through your cadence filled words sweet poet.

Best wishes and big hugs,
/Kit

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7 posted 2002-01-01 02:20 AM


No words...just a very,very gentle smile that you understand...
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8 posted 2002-01-01 02:31 AM


I've read bits and pieces...wish I knew the whole story of this love.
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9 posted 2002-01-01 03:35 AM




"Here, you cradled my face in your hands
and the world fell away.
Here, our love for one another
rose above us and shined down
in healing rays of warmth and promise.
And in that profound moment in time
we shared the same breath ...
shared the same heart beat.
And so it should only be here
that it all becomes so clear."





(smiles) Oh my gosh, these visions are sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I could see the blue crystal butterflies swoon and light a heart with the flitter of lights and comfort! (sigh) Soooooooo beautfiully breathtaking, sweet Janet, we all love you so much! HAPPY NEW YEAR!!! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Janet, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton


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10 posted 2002-01-01 04:31 AM


Nice writing sweet Janet...James
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11 posted 2002-01-01 05:05 AM


J, I can't even attempt to highlight a favorite line or phrase...if I did, and this is so cliche, but your entire post would be in my reply...soooo, I will just say that this is so definitely worth the wait...and I hope you think so too...NOT that I hope the wait happens again, but you know what I mean... ...um, LIBRARY...

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you can change the weather...

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12 posted 2002-01-01 06:11 AM


Janet Marie
I believe you have just engraved a poem in my heart. This is exquisite - every single line
It will stay with me forever.
This is a tribute to you both and to the beauty of love
Thank you for sharing this
Liz

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13 posted 2002-01-01 08:05 AM



So gently beautiful, so full of promises yet to come, when that other plane is reached...

for whatever little inspiration I may have given you, I can truly say, you took it, and flew...

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14 posted 2002-01-01 10:04 AM


JM,
Of I and Why

You speak of why, in sigh and I
In whispers of a past goodbye
Flavored with a memory tear
To magnify DeVante near

In sorrow and with muted wing
You pray, you cry, you say, you sing.
And send your prayer to heavens ear
And know within yourself he’ll hear.

You stir old words and make up new
Light them in the soul of you.
Bright the spirit of his light
Light once more his phantoms sight

A faith that burns as bright as yours
Has no need of forever mores.
You were his butterfly and lure
That paints his ghost in reassure.

So fly my butterfly just fly
He smiles on you from up on high.


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15 posted 2002-01-01 10:08 AM




My words could never do your thoughts justice....I can only say I know....


Lauren~


Tomorrow's another day
and I'm thirsty any way
so bring on the rain

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16 posted 2002-01-01 10:21 AM


I read every beautiful touching word Janet Marie..
Tears turning to poetry...A very lovely thought..HUGSSS

                       ~Victoria~

"To love and be loved is to feel the sun from both sides."
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17 posted 2002-01-01 12:12 PM


My Sweet Sis~
I could never pick just one line...or one
verse that touched my heart and soul deeper
than any other, just as the life of one
special butterfly brought us together so
does his flight continue to draw us nearer
still.  You always write beyond the heavens
and the horizons with him sweet Janet.  I
love you baby...you've captured him and his
beauty as well as anyone can capture a
butterfly...and we both know...butterflies
are meant to be free...and cherished always.



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18 posted 2002-01-01 12:20 PM


So I wont question the silence any more.
I wont scream at the stars nor cry to the sky.
I'll just lace my fingers in your memory's trace
and watch your seasons dance upon the water.
Here, I will linger in your whispering winds.
And as the stars rain down on me ...
as you turn my tears into poetry,
I breathe again in the quiet comfort
of knowing that when I need you the most,
just like tonight ...
you will come and touch down again.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Janet,
So lovely. There's no way I can describe the beauty of your words, or how they touch my heart.


Hugs,
Deb



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19 posted 2002-01-01 12:44 PM


Janet,

your words as always, touch so deep.

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20 posted 2002-01-01 01:04 PM


As everyone else has said, each line is beautiful. My favorite, which strikes me deepest and most personally, is
"*You are there, yet here with me still* ... my pen's last word, my heart's until."

Truly wonderful writing! It's refreshing (and exciting!) to run across quality poetry... especially when I can feel it... and the voice could be my own.

:)

(I intend to add you to my personal library so I'm sure not to miss MORE GOOD STUFF from you!)

Keep it coming!

~Julie~

Janet Marie
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21 posted 2002-01-01 01:10 PM


thank you, every one for these heartfelt replies...forgive me for taking so long to come back..I am having major computer problems and internet connection problems...
posting this last night was a time consuming and stressful undertaking...and I was kicked off mutliple times after getting it posted..
I will try and get back in here later today and reply to you all AND your poetry from another computer...mine is definatly on its last leg. *sigh*

(Is anyone else completely overwhelmed by two full forums of new poetry??) SHEESH...
not even a moth-poetry-aholic can keep up in here anymore.

~~~~~~~~

Thank you all so much...

Sy-babes...thank you wont touch how much that poem means to me...but I know you already know...love ya my Stinkie

Happy New Year to all my fellow poets and friends...
my love & respect to Poetry Land.

peace and poetry
jm



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22 posted 2002-01-01 02:39 PM


Janet, there are no words to express.  To touch this kind of love, to have that memory to hold.  I know.....how hard.....
be well my friend, and may the New Year give you much love and peace.  Your spirit is special lil butterfly.....so special.  Hugs and love to you.
Donna

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

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23 posted 2002-01-01 03:11 PM



Well sweet lady,

When you hit the blue pages, you hit them beautifully is all I can say, due to lack of words that is

Titia

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24 posted 2002-01-01 03:41 PM


Janet,

This was exquisite my friend! God how I have missed your wonderful words of inspiration and of this timeless love you describe so beautifully! Hope the new year brings you lots of happiness and remember something...you got a whole lot of people who love ya very much girlie and I'm near the top of that list! Take care.

Love ya,
Amy

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mean they don't love you with all they have"

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25 posted 2002-01-01 04:54 PM


Janet Marie - it is very difficult to find the words to reply to something written as beautiful as this...

BC

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26 posted 2002-01-01 05:15 PM


Janet, what does one say but I am touched. As you always do with your writings.

Dee

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27 posted 2002-01-01 05:47 PM


beaux mots sincères de l'amour

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

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28 posted 2002-01-01 06:23 PM


Janet, this is so beautiful and special that I don't think any words I could write here would do justice to your words.
This is pure excellence in verse.

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29 posted 2002-01-01 09:43 PM


This is a lovely expression of self, JM, woven with love.

Cor

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30 posted 2002-01-01 10:47 PM


What an incredible poems you have penned here JM. The love and pain of loss shine through these pieces. Sure sounds like it was the most incredible love story. The pain of losing someone so special must be almost indescribable. Hugs to you sweet poetess.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

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31 posted 2002-01-01 10:59 PM


I have read this many, many times.  You have always been a poet I dearly respect and admire but I tell you with this post, I can feel so much there I just didn't see or realize before.  Your heart...is laid out for all to see.  Your contribution to the forum, even as much as we both know there are times when we need to pull away, is amazing.  You've given so much.  A blessed New year to you.

'Fiction is the truth inside the lie.' ~Stephen King

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32 posted 2002-01-02 12:38 PM


Janet Marie,
A depth of love we can all hope to know. But the pain of separation...

"I'll just lace my fingers in your memory's trace"

I am deeply touched and blessed...

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33 posted 2002-01-02 02:05 AM


It just so happened I happened on this piece while Lori Anne Speed was playing JM, now do I have to tell you the kind of shape I am in right now?  I can't even comment on yours words, as they are above any comment I could make, but Sy's last four lines about covers my thoughts JM.  Email coming, if it makes it!  

~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~

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34 posted 2002-01-02 06:13 AM


I am so glad i decided to get back on and post today or i may have not had the chance to read this.  All i can say is wow, the imagery is great and i can't just pick one line as the best i love them all.  Thank you for sharing this with everyone.

There's a peace inside us all
Let it be your friend
It will help you carry on
In the end
There's a peace inside us all
-Creed

We are all givin

Janet Marie
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35 posted 2002-01-02 07:25 AM


Well all I can do ... is borrow from all of you ... and tell you my words wont do these  replies justice ... so I will hope that my thanks truly convey the emotions behind them.
Again I apologize for not being able to thank you each personally for these...
I would rather spend what limited time I am going to have trying to read and reply to your work...I am profoundly behind in here ...with all the new posts that came up in 17 the same night this new forum went up ... so add profoundly overwhelmed as well. I got one reply off yesterday and got the boot.
So please accept my apologies to anyone I miss and know Im trying...my computer is not. *sigh* Also accept my gratitude for these kind words and for taking the time to read this tribute..I know it was a long post.
Now Im off to see how many poems this tired comp will let load before I hear that funny noise and get "da boot"

thank you all...
Happy New Year.
peace and poetry
jm

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36 posted 2002-01-02 10:14 AM


JanetMarie~

When 'inspire' takes you higher ...
we are blessed with the beauty your heart speaks~

'By candle light in late of night's spill ... impatiently praying for inspire's instill,
*You are there, yet here with me still* ... my pen's last word, my heart's until.


'So I wont question the silence any more.
I wont scream at the stars nor cry to the sky.
I'll just lace my fingers in your memory's trace
and watch your seasons dance upon the water.
Here, I will linger in your whispering winds.
And as the stars rain down on me ...
as you turn my tears into poetry,
I breathe again in the quiet comfort
of knowing that when I need you the most,
just like tonight ...
you will come and touch down again.'


Exquisite~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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37 posted 2002-01-02 12:01 PM


Lost in open 17 as I was, never knowing I'd find this gem in a new place in a new year from your loving heart and pen.

I so understand the pain when the heart cries out to write but pen is empty. These words show it so clearly, your talent and your need. As long as the poet and the desire remains the words will come.

You know I do love seeing your writings on DeVante, it just shows that the soul never dies when a poet can give it life.

Happy New Year Browneye's.

Parker

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38 posted 2002-01-02 12:16 PM


Clap clap, standing ovation,floria
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39 posted 2002-01-02 12:27 PM


"the ground is still warm
with your presence ... as am I."

Made me cry with that...
How can we be so far away and still stand together so often in the same place!

You did it again, JM...love you!

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40 posted 2002-01-02 01:34 PM


At first, I was speechless....

After reading your rhyme, I thought wow this is good poetry, then I read (what seemed at first to be too long while scanning) your free verse and enjoyed that one even more. I enjoy this type of deep and sentimental poetry that delves into the darker side of reality. This reminded me of Opeth lyrics...no doubt about it, this is excellent poetry.

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41 posted 2002-01-02 07:49 PM


I'll just lace my fingers in your memory's trace

Your verse laces our hearts with something that goes beyond human nature. This is spiritual to me. Etchings of the soul. Where poetry and devotion meet. Illumination. I had to say something. I tried yesterday and couldn't. I wanted to you to know exactly how this made me feel. I hope it makes perfect sense.

Sincerely,
Regina

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42 posted 2002-01-03 12:19 PM


I read this from home, but wasn't able to reply. However, I jotted down my first thoughts... for after many readings, they're still accurate. *S*

You don't play fair, young lady... not at all!!! *severe scowl, complete with tapping foot* You know dern well I had every intention of being a brat and posting a simple "wow" on your next poem... Then you go and post this masterpiece and I can only offer respect... but WOW! would certainly be appropriate. *S*

Your muse may too often sit silently when you long to speak... but a muse who gives such gifts upon waking certainly makes up with a vengeance for any napping done!

pen in hand wrought with regret ... muted muse unable to forget.

Your excellent alliteration and magnificent imagery are matched only by the ache conveyed...

As for Whispers on the Wind... it's simultaneously powerful and tender, heartbreaking and hopeful.

Here, where two winters
have now come and gone,
the ground is still warm
with your presence ... as am I.


-------------------------------------

as you turn my tears into poetry,
I breathe again in the quiet comfort
of knowing that when I need you the most,
just like tonight ...
you will come and touch down again.


and touch our hearts... This is exquisite.

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43 posted 2002-01-03 01:35 PM


bet you shed a few tears while writing this one, huh?  Man, these words are something to be kept in a book someday you know?

I mean if I could write like this, well, I can't but if I could.  You have a large following and well deserved.


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44 posted 2002-01-03 02:29 PM


Janet Marie,
I'm back to say...I shared this with my wife and told her of a line I found so powerful! She found it without my telling her which one.  So very moving are the words...

"I'll just lace my fingers in your memory's trace"

Janet Marie
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45 posted 2002-01-03 08:55 PM


I'll tell you what...you guys are taking my breath away with the replies on this....
I am so humbled and honored by your kind words...and most of all grateful to see this thru your eyes....I was too close to this piece to know if I had convyed what I wanted to....so I thank you for allowing me to touch you with him....
Again I apologize for taking so long to get here...this comp is trying to hang on...
Im coming in thru Netscape instead of AOL and it seems to be working better..
Im not crashing...but its very slow loading poems and replies take much longer...but its better than not being here.
AND? the pages are purple?? LOL How groovy is that...
Thank you all for such gracious compliments...
my words lack...but are heartfelt.
peace and poetry
jm

"Though my soul may sit in darkness,
It will arise in perfect light.
For I have loved the stars much too fondly ...
To be fearful of the night."

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46 posted 2002-01-06 04:04 PM


bump for a spectular piece of writing.....

Kathleen--
Neither genius, fame, nor love show the greatness of the soul.
Only kindness can do that. ~Jean Baptiste Henri Lacordaire~

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47 posted 2002-01-13 05:53 PM



I must say that the blue pages move so fast -I can't believe that I haven't read these 2 poems until now!

You always stir so many emotions in me when I read your words....beautiful, touching, exquisite, aching aren't even enough to describe your poems.  When you write from your heart in his memory - you write the best piece of you.  These are going into my library, as I am sure that DeVante keeps them in his   

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

Ethan Halo
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on the roof again
48 posted 2002-01-18 04:54 AM


are we the sane-est people on the planet...?
we're just on that wavelength, ya know.... because, damn. i know exactly what you're feeling. how DO you do that.
it's like we walk the same path.

*ooooo* that second stanza...
"Winter's white winds pirouette ... snow falls in silent silhouette,
pen in hand wrought with regret ... muted muse unable to forget.
Fragments of verse written in vain ... shadowed by sorrow's refrain,
a poet cursed in aching abstain ... the words fail but the need remains"

if it didn't hit home so hard, i could dress it up with all kinds of pretty adjectives and praising comments.
it's hard to let go of the rough edged memories when they're the biggest bit o inspiration.... thankkfully, you've got some wonderful ones mixed in...
i like the style of "whispers"...havem't read much from you in this style. but it's great.
it takes you talent for imagery and charges it so much more in this style. mabe it's not rhyming, maybe i been gone too long... who knows. but i like it, and i'm another understander here at the forums.
Happy new year, JM.

"it a long december, and there's reason to believe
maybe this year will be better than the last.
can't remember all those times i tried to tell myself
to hold on to these moments as they pass."


*simplify*

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

49 posted 2002-01-18 10:10 AM


dear Kay, thank you so much for the bump


Melis....thank you sweet poet...its real easy to miss things in here now...
pages move fast and ... life takes us away from here ...(and computer probs)
thank you for the honor of being in your library.

Ethan baby....you are so cool....thank you my friend..yes so many times we have mirrored one anothers thoughts...its always a treat to find you here....
thank you for taking the time to read this and tell me what parts you felt the most in.
and youre right...Ive only done about 5-6 of the free verse ...you know me...rhymes in my head ...but I enjoy the release the free verse allows.
Now post me some of your rhymes divine


thank you all again for these heart hugging replies....
and for your patience as I ride out this tired computer...my new one is a week or two off yet....so until then I play the crash game

peace and poetry

It's not like you to say sorry
I was waiting on a different story
This time I'm mistaken ...
for handing you a heart worth breakin'

~nickleback~

emily
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since 2000-10-03
Posts 142
USA
50 posted 2002-01-22 09:28 PM


I'm sure you've been told, but I, for one, admire
you for replying as much as you do and rarely
do you post.  I hope your muse returns soon.
You are a faithful reader and a caring person.

Emily


Vacuity
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since 2002-01-22
Posts 12

51 posted 2002-01-22 10:15 PM


-smiles faintly- i like those a lot...(i'm really not good at leaving notes or critiquing...sorry I couldn't say more
Midnitesun
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Gaia
52 posted 2002-01-22 11:09 PM


I can't even begin to put into words how this poem affects me. But it will be in my library, to read again and agin. JM, this is the most stunningly beautiful 'remembering' poetry I've ever read.
Janet Marie
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Posts 18554

53 posted 2002-01-23 12:40 PM


"emily" ... thank you very very much, youre a kind person too  I hope my muse returns soon also

Vacuity ... your reply was heartfelt and sincere...thank you and welcome

Kacy...you honor and humble me with this gracious reply and being in your library,
thank you very very much.


thank you everyone on this thread for such wonderful and touching replies.
love to poetry land

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

54 posted 2004-01-01 08:49 PM



I can remember Forever December,
The center of dying ... the heart of the pain.
The stars surround me ... the cold astounds me.

Tabitha's Secret

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455

55 posted 2004-01-01 10:01 PM


"Winter's white winds pirouette ... snow falls in silent silhouette,
pen in hand wrought with regret ... muted muse unable to forget.
Fragments of verse written in vain ... shadowed by sorrow's refrain,
a poet cursed in aching abstain ... the words fail but the need remains."

You're a good friend JM and you know how I feel about his story.  Some things endure...



Janet Marie
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56 posted 2005-01-01 01:06 AM






serenity blaze
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57 posted 2005-01-02 03:05 AM


Have my heart hugs constant love...

today, and tomorrow, and always

love doesn't haunt, it thrives

you taught me that


Midnitesun
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Gaia
58 posted 2005-01-02 09:45 PM


scented soft gentle hugs
and raspberry tea thoughts


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