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Bill Charles
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25 posted 01-01-2002 04:54 PM       View Profile for Bill Charles   Email Bill Charles   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bill Charles

Janet Marie - it is very difficult to find the words to reply to something written as beautiful as this...

BC
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26 posted 01-01-2002 05:15 PM       View Profile for Dee   Email Dee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dee

Janet, what does one say but I am touched. As you always do with your writings.

Dee

I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life.     a brand

Jamie
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27 posted 01-01-2002 05:47 PM       View Profile for Jamie   Email Jamie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Jamie's Home Page   View IP for Jamie

beaux mots sincères de l'amour

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

Madame Chipmunk
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28 posted 01-01-2002 06:23 PM       View Profile for Madame Chipmunk   Email Madame Chipmunk   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Madame Chipmunk's Home Page   View IP for Madame Chipmunk

Janet, this is so beautiful and special that I don't think any words I could write here would do justice to your words.
This is pure excellence in verse.

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

Corinne
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29 posted 01-01-2002 09:43 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

This is a lovely expression of self, JM, woven with love.

Cor
Tracey
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30 posted 01-01-2002 10:47 PM       View Profile for Tracey   Email Tracey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tracey

What an incredible poems you have penned here JM. The love and pain of loss shine through these pieces. Sure sounds like it was the most incredible love story. The pain of losing someone so special must be almost indescribable. Hugs to you sweet poetess.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Irish Rose
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31 posted 01-01-2002 10:59 PM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

I have read this many, many times.  You have always been a poet I dearly respect and admire but I tell you with this post, I can feel so much there I just didn't see or realize before.  Your heart...is laid out for all to see.  Your contribution to the forum, even as much as we both know there are times when we need to pull away, is amazing.  You've given so much.  A blessed New year to you.

'Fiction is the truth inside the lie.' ~Stephen King

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32 posted 01-02-2002 12:38 AM       View Profile for Larry C   Email Larry C   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Larry C's Home Page   View IP for Larry C

Janet Marie,
A depth of love we can all hope to know. But the pain of separation...

"I'll just lace my fingers in your memory's trace"

I am deeply touched and blessed...
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33 posted 01-02-2002 02:05 AM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

It just so happened I happened on this piece while Lori Anne Speed was playing JM, now do I have to tell you the kind of shape I am in right now?  I can't even comment on yours words, as they are above any comment I could make, but Sy's last four lines about covers my thoughts JM.  Email coming, if it makes it!  

~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~

baerlon
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34 posted 01-02-2002 06:13 AM       View Profile for baerlon   Email baerlon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit baerlon's Home Page   View IP for baerlon

I am so glad i decided to get back on and post today or i may have not had the chance to read this.  All i can say is wow, the imagery is great and i can't just pick one line as the best i love them all.  Thank you for sharing this with everyone.

There's a peace inside us all
Let it be your friend
It will help you carry on
In the end
There's a peace inside us all
-Creed

We are all givin

Janet Marie
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35 posted 01-02-2002 07:25 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Well all I can do ... is borrow from all of you ... and tell you my words wont do these  replies justice ... so I will hope that my thanks truly convey the emotions behind them.
Again I apologize for not being able to thank you each personally for these...
I would rather spend what limited time I am going to have trying to read and reply to your work...I am profoundly behind in here ...with all the new posts that came up in 17 the same night this new forum went up ... so add profoundly overwhelmed as well. I got one reply off yesterday and got the boot.
So please accept my apologies to anyone I miss and know Im trying...my computer is not. *sigh* Also accept my gratitude for these kind words and for taking the time to read this tribute..I know it was a long post.
Now Im off to see how many poems this tired comp will let load before I hear that funny noise and get "da boot"

thank you all...
Happy New Year.
peace and poetry
jm
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36 posted 01-02-2002 10:14 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

JanetMarie~

When 'inspire' takes you higher ...
we are blessed with the beauty your heart speaks~

'By candle light in late of night's spill ... impatiently praying for inspire's instill,
*You are there, yet here with me still* ... my pen's last word, my heart's until.


'So I wont question the silence any more.
I wont scream at the stars nor cry to the sky.
I'll just lace my fingers in your memory's trace
and watch your seasons dance upon the water.
Here, I will linger in your whispering winds.
And as the stars rain down on me ...
as you turn my tears into poetry,
I breathe again in the quiet comfort
of knowing that when I need you the most,
just like tonight ...
you will come and touch down again.'


Exquisite~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Parker
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37 posted 01-02-2002 12:01 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Lost in open 17 as I was, never knowing I'd find this gem in a new place in a new year from your loving heart and pen.

I so understand the pain when the heart cries out to write but pen is empty. These words show it so clearly, your talent and your need. As long as the poet and the desire remains the words will come.

You know I do love seeing your writings on DeVante, it just shows that the soul never dies when a poet can give it life.

Happy New Year Browneye's.

Parker

[This message has been edited by Parker (01-02-2002 12:04 PM).]

strbbux
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38 posted 01-02-2002 12:16 PM       View Profile for strbbux   Email strbbux   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for strbbux

Clap clap, standing ovation,floria
serenity blaze
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39 posted 01-02-2002 12:27 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

"the ground is still warm
with your presence ... as am I."

Made me cry with that...
How can we be so far away and still stand together so often in the same place!

You did it again, JM...love you!
Opeth
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40 posted 01-02-2002 01:34 PM       View Profile for Opeth   Email Opeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Opeth

At first, I was speechless....

After reading your rhyme, I thought wow this is good poetry, then I read (what seemed at first to be too long while scanning) your free verse and enjoyed that one even more. I enjoy this type of deep and sentimental poetry that delves into the darker side of reality. This reminded me of Opeth lyrics...no doubt about it, this is excellent poetry.
rwood
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41 posted 01-02-2002 07:49 PM       View Profile for rwood   Email rwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rwood

I'll just lace my fingers in your memory's trace

Your verse laces our hearts with something that goes beyond human nature. This is spiritual to me. Etchings of the soul. Where poetry and devotion meet. Illumination. I had to say something. I tried yesterday and couldn't. I wanted to you to know exactly how this made me feel. I hope it makes perfect sense.

Sincerely,
Regina
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on the threshold of a dream


42 posted 01-03-2002 12:19 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I read this from home, but wasn't able to reply. However, I jotted down my first thoughts... for after many readings, they're still accurate. *S*

You don't play fair, young lady... not at all!!! *severe scowl, complete with tapping foot* You know dern well I had every intention of being a brat and posting a simple "wow" on your next poem... Then you go and post this masterpiece and I can only offer respect... but WOW! would certainly be appropriate. *S*

Your muse may too often sit silently when you long to speak... but a muse who gives such gifts upon waking certainly makes up with a vengeance for any napping done!

pen in hand wrought with regret ... muted muse unable to forget.

Your excellent alliteration and magnificent imagery are matched only by the ache conveyed...

As for Whispers on the Wind... it's simultaneously powerful and tender, heartbreaking and hopeful.

Here, where two winters
have now come and gone,
the ground is still warm
with your presence ... as am I.


-------------------------------------

as you turn my tears into poetry,
I breathe again in the quiet comfort
of knowing that when I need you the most,
just like tonight ...
you will come and touch down again.


and touch our hearts... This is exquisite.

[This message has been edited by suthern (01-03-2002 01:51 PM).]

Robert A
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43 posted 01-03-2002 01:35 PM       View Profile for Robert A   Email Robert A   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Robert A

bet you shed a few tears while writing this one, huh?  Man, these words are something to be kept in a book someday you know?

I mean if I could write like this, well, I can't but if I could.  You have a large following and well deserved.

Larry C
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44 posted 01-03-2002 02:29 PM       View Profile for Larry C   Email Larry C   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Larry C's Home Page   View IP for Larry C

Janet Marie,
I'm back to say...I shared this with my wife and told her of a line I found so powerful! She found it without my telling her which one.  So very moving are the words...

"I'll just lace my fingers in your memory's trace"
Janet Marie
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45 posted 01-03-2002 08:55 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

I'll tell you what...you guys are taking my breath away with the replies on this....
I am so humbled and honored by your kind words...and most of all grateful to see this thru your eyes....I was too close to this piece to know if I had convyed what I wanted to....so I thank you for allowing me to touch you with him....
Again I apologize for taking so long to get here...this comp is trying to hang on...
Im coming in thru Netscape instead of AOL and it seems to be working better..
Im not crashing...but its very slow loading poems and replies take much longer...but its better than not being here.
AND? the pages are purple?? LOL How groovy is that...
Thank you all for such gracious compliments...
my words lack...but are heartfelt.
peace and poetry
jm

"Though my soul may sit in darkness,
It will arise in perfect light.
For I have loved the stars much too fondly ...
To be fearful of the night."

Irish Rose
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46 posted 01-06-2002 04:04 PM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

bump for a spectular piece of writing.....

Kathleen--
Neither genius, fame, nor love show the greatness of the soul.
Only kindness can do that. ~Jean Baptiste Henri Lacordaire~

Honeybee
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47 posted 01-13-2002 05:53 PM       View Profile for Honeybee   Email Honeybee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Honeybee


I must say that the blue pages move so fast -I can't believe that I haven't read these 2 poems until now!

You always stir so many emotions in me when I read your words....beautiful, touching, exquisite, aching aren't even enough to describe your poems.  When you write from your heart in his memory - you write the best piece of you.  These are going into my library, as I am sure that DeVante keeps them in his   

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

Ethan Halo
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on the roof again


48 posted 01-18-2002 04:54 AM       View Profile for Ethan Halo   Email Ethan Halo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ethan Halo's Home Page   View IP for Ethan Halo

are we the sane-est people on the planet...?
we're just on that wavelength, ya know.... because, damn. i know exactly what you're feeling. how DO you do that.
it's like we walk the same path.

*ooooo* that second stanza...
"Winter's white winds pirouette ... snow falls in silent silhouette,
pen in hand wrought with regret ... muted muse unable to forget.
Fragments of verse written in vain ... shadowed by sorrow's refrain,
a poet cursed in aching abstain ... the words fail but the need remains"

if it didn't hit home so hard, i could dress it up with all kinds of pretty adjectives and praising comments.
it's hard to let go of the rough edged memories when they're the biggest bit o inspiration.... thankkfully, you've got some wonderful ones mixed in...
i like the style of "whispers"...havem't read much from you in this style. but it's great.
it takes you talent for imagery and charges it so much more in this style. mabe it's not rhyming, maybe i been gone too long... who knows. but i like it, and i'm another understander here at the forums.
Happy new year, JM.

"it a long december, and there's reason to believe
maybe this year will be better than the last.
can't remember all those times i tried to tell myself
to hold on to these moments as they pass."


*simplify*

Janet Marie
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49 posted 01-18-2002 10:10 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

dear Kay, thank you so much for the bump


Melis....thank you sweet poet...its real easy to miss things in here now...
pages move fast and ... life takes us away from here ...(and computer probs)
thank you for the honor of being in your library.

Ethan baby....you are so cool....thank you my friend..yes so many times we have mirrored one anothers thoughts...its always a treat to find you here....
thank you for taking the time to read this and tell me what parts you felt the most in.
and youre right...Ive only done about 5-6 of the free verse ...you know me...rhymes in my head ...but I enjoy the release the free verse allows.
Now post me some of your rhymes divine


thank you all again for these heart hugging replies....
and for your patience as I ride out this tired computer...my new one is a week or two off yet....so until then I play the crash game

peace and poetry

It's not like you to say sorry
I was waiting on a different story
This time I'm mistaken ...
for handing you a heart worth breakin'

~nickleback~

 
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