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Open Poetry #17

Count the Change

The Jackal
Member

since 1999-08-13

Posts 426
Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A

0 posted 2001-12-30 01:08 AM

     Cant you
      Own me
   take away my debt
       and i'll
     appreciate this
          wet
       wet  world

      if i were on again
    would i still let you in
      to water my plans
and tell me how much i weigh
            and
   how long  i can play today

  like a careful little man
     i am here to
     push your hand

   and now ive got the same
  my favorite toy   (the same)
  but every toy becomes insane

  wondering whats in a name
    and why bitter and blind
         come to mind

        Try me
      im free
  window shop and drool
   asking you to fold
    keep doing as your told
     both reaching to the light
    but well prepared
      .. for our long lives..

by John Dixon

no longer afraid of the dark or midday shadows nothing so ridiculously teenage and desperate

ecrivan
Member Elite

since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

1 posted 2001-12-30 01:49 AM

like the style and the punch behind some of the lines..well done

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2001-12-30 09:41 AM

An organized ramble...I read it three times...

bitter thoughts, tightly held...

write on!

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