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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan 
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with crooked grin, so wide his tawny hair, it's usual mess I can't believe he died today I bought the stone for him the mason's hammer struck hard breaking my heart into pieces splinters of slick granite shards headstone tombstone gravestone deathstone he lies beneath the earth alone his pall encased in rites of dirt sealed soft with weedy green as saffron sculpted flowers flirt with lace of Ann the Queen he slumbers neath the loamy soil I cannot wake him ever "he's late for school again", I think but now he sleeps forever copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Talk about a sledgehammer! I certainly hope this is simply a poetic creation... |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Not easy finding words to attend these thoughts ... very well written Hope your new year casts a brighter light Rex |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
What a powerful and saddening message. The flow of the poem was brilliant and the words held their own with what they were getting across. A great poem, and I hope it isn't based on truth.. There are no words I can think to express the emotions.. Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial) |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Yes it isn't easy to address the issues you admiringly express, wishing always the best in the YEARS to come!  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
This one grabbed my heart. Is this about a child you lost? I really felt some strong pain in here. I love your poetry, it is always so real. [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (12-30-2001 03:58 AM).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Lyra, *HuGS*. Is it getting better? Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Madame C, I have to go along with Balladeer on this one Well done. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lyra, dear Lyra~ No greater compliment can I pay you, than to say that you've touched my heart with thoughts from yours~ 'Just yesterday his hug was warm with crooked grin, so wide his tawny hair, it's usual mess I can't believe he died today I bought the stone for him the mason's hammer struck hard breaking my heart into pieces splinters of slick granite shards headstone tombstone gravestone deathstone he lies beneath the earth alone his pall encased in rites of dirt sealed soft with weedy green as saffron sculpted flowers flirt with lace of Ann the Queen he slumbers neath the loamy soil I cannot wake him ever "he's late for school again", I think but now he sleeps forever' This entire piece is replete with sculpted memories from the heart~ *BIG HUGS* ... *BIG HUGS* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Lyra darling girl, as Keth said is it any easier? Silly question really, I doubt it. Wonderful writing, as always your writing shines like a beacon, and he's not gone, and never will be, HE is with him and HE is with you.    Love and warm stuff As always Mushy take care of you darling girl To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Lyra...beautifully done...a tribute in a way. Nice words...The sadness of losing someone heals very slowly... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Lyra~This is extemely well written and just reaches out and grabs at my heart. The presentation also is very well done! Good yet painful writing here. Hugs, Nancy. *~ Wishing everyone a New Year filled with Peace & Love ~* |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
In some way you must have known this at one time or another...and my heart is heavy with yours... but thank you for sharing...in grief, we find our way together... |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
Poetry saved me in some of the darkest moments of my life and I feel very blessed to have the opportunity be able to see how an incredible mom like you has found a place to work through the event that we all fear the most...the loss of our child. I hope that you find healing and peace and continue to share these pieces with us. |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Dear Madame chipmunk. this poem tore into my soul. It is so sad, so well written. every word drew a tear. I lost my son last year, dec 5,2000 just before Christmas. and I thought I could not go on living. I started writing then for the first time in my life. And writing has literally saved my life. Of course, second to God..I healed through my writing. I wrote mostly of him at first. I wish there was a room on her for memorial writing. This poem was just so heart wrenching. thank you for it. floria |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
you're invited to bring uo Whole Holes that slid to page 4 over night with one comment, it's quite witty, you should it enjoy it..I too think there is something after life..there has to be!  |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks Balladeer, but this is for real and it is the hardest poem I've ever written. My older son died suddenly and tragically in July, 2000. I've written several drafts of this one and somehow, none of them seem to do justice to my true feelings.  My latest draft is posted in the critical analysis forum here. Its slightly different than this one, and I would appreciate it if anyone would please take a look at it and give me some constructive criticism on it. Thanks Thanks Rex and Voiceless, please see my reply to Balladeer...above. Martin, Keth and Seymour....thanks so much for your replys. And, yes it still hurts and I don't think it will ever go away. A mother should never outlive her child. Marsha and Marge...Thanks so much for all of your hugs. I think I need all I can get.  copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks so much for your reply, Magness. It was hard to write this but it was also very healing. Nancy, thanks so much for your hugs Sunshine, thanks for your understanding. copyright2001 Lyra Nesius "poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks [This message has been edited by Madame Chipmunk (01-01-2002 04:21 PM).] |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Amusemi....Thanks for your wonderful, soft spoken reply, and you are absolutely right about writing poetry. It is absolutely the most therapeutic thing I have ever done for myself. Floria, I am so sorry about your child...and I know that each of us knows how the other feels. There is absolutely no sadness which is deeper than losing a child. My first husband died in 1999, and I thought that was the most horrible thing that ever happened to me.......until I lost my son. I don't think any parent should have to outlive his/her child. It is the most painful experience known to humankind. I am glad that your writing is helping you...I have always found it to be wonderful therapy. copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Kacy, Thanks so much for reading and replying to this one and also for your generous compliment. It is about my older son who died suddenly and tragically a year and a half ago. I have re-written it several times and somehow, it never seems to express the depths of my sadness quite deeply enough. If you ever go to the critical analysis forum, would you please check out this same poem out there. That one is a slightly updated version of this one. Please let me know what you think. Thanks. copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lyra, I am sure you never recover from the loss of a child, It's enough to make your mind run completely wild. There isn't enough understanding to quiet the heart of a mother, Except to say how truly sorry I am, just from one to another. |
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