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Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

0 posted 2001-12-29 04:14 PM


My body betrays me whenever you're near
My heartbeat races so fast
And angel voices from heaven I hear
Whenever I see you walk past

Your touch on my hand your kiss on my brow
Causes my body to sweat
I need you; I want you in the here and the now
To love with no lingering regret

My breath becomes sighing as you hover close
My eyelashes flutter so fast
My body betrays me but I am morose
That all of our loving can't last

My palms are sweating my vision is blurred
All at the touch of your hand
Gently caressing my passion is stirred
And I will melt on command

My body betrays me my heart does too
How can I ever compete?
Give in to the madness love you through and through
Accept that you make me complete



Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



© Copyright 2001 Lynne Dale - All Rights Reserved
GenXer
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since 2001-12-15
Posts 583
USA
1 posted 2001-12-29 04:21 PM


Keth - Beautifully penned (that is my new saying).  I really loved the lines where you used "My body betrays me."  So very good.

Dave

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
2 posted 2001-12-29 04:31 PM


Kethry,
My first WOW. *L*

Ivy Rose
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since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300
MA, USA
3 posted 2001-12-29 04:35 PM


Kethry...Passionate, embracable words that speak of love's infinite dance ***Ivy Rose
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

4 posted 2001-12-29 07:49 PM


Your touch on my hand your kiss on my brow
Causes my body to sweat
I need you; I want you in the here and the now
To love with no lingering regret

My breath becomes sighing as you hover close
My eyelashes flutter so fast
My body betrays me but I am morose
That all of our loving can't last
===============================

whats a moth to do but go with the flow
a bittersweet passionate beauty from your pen of cadence Keth..
some things hurt so good
later-body-betrayed-gator  lol

OH...and Happy New Year down under

When your own emptiness is all thats getting through
there comes a point when youre not sure why youre still talking...
I passed that point long ago

amusemi
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since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262
A State of Disarray
5 posted 2001-12-29 07:58 PM


"My body betrays me my heart does too
How can I ever compete?"

I like how you describe that powerless feeling that consumes us sometimes when we are paralyzed by self doubt.

Lovely paint.

Madame Chipmunk
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since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296
Michigan
6 posted 2001-12-29 08:32 PM


I loved it, Keth...
especially this verse

My palms are sweating my vision is blurred
All at the touch of your hand
Gently caressing my passion is stirred
And I will melt on command

very visual and great work!

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now
7 posted 2001-12-29 08:48 PM


Kethry - just lovely words of wanting. He's a lucky one, he is for sure...

BC

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
8 posted 2001-12-29 08:50 PM


Oh Kethry, now this is the other side of you!  I love this....so sensual and oh...you know!   So different from the beans and beer! Ha!  
~Hugs, Nancy~

*~ Wishing everyone a New Year filled with Peace & Love ~*

Magnus
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since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA
9 posted 2001-12-29 08:57 PM


Keth...you are right...your body and your
pen both betray you...they speak volumes of
the feelings you have expressed...Well
written...Nice..

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

10 posted 2001-12-29 10:18 PM


What's going on "down under"

I am/Kathleen/

Mistletoe Angel
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11 posted 2001-12-29 10:31 PM




(sigh) Oh my gosh, this is sooooooo romantic, I love your love poetry! This is soooooo beautifully sensual, sweet friend, may your heart forever be embraced by the joy of true love! (kiss on cheek) I enjoy it, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kethry, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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