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Madame Chipmunk
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0 posted 2001-12-29 12:10 PM


this is for my new husband, David.We were married this past October 23.

You are my poem
you've written yourself gently into my heart
from first delicate verse
each couplet laced with love
and metaphors of romance
your passion for me alone, set apart

you are my song
you've sung your way softly into my soul
each note resounds with warmth
your tender melody
strikes chords of our merging selves
two becoming one, becoming whole

you are my love
you've woven your dear spirit into my keep
bonded by ribbons of trust
our intertwining souls
share lustful fantasies
inspired thoughts, so deep

you are my forever
for me, you've spun lover's castles, ornate
our rainbow colored passion
builds bridges to tomorrow
across rivers of life, uncertain
we cannot know, the fates


copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks


[This message has been edited by Madame Chipmunk (12-29-2001 06:07 PM).]

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1 posted 2001-12-29 12:13 PM


"you are my song
you've sung your way softly into my soul
each note resounds with warmth
your tender melody
strikes chords of our merging selves
two becoming one, becoming whole"


I do so love this how romantic

ecrivan
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2 posted 2001-12-29 12:25 PM


very touching true and a crowning sense of the romantic here. Sooo nice


Kethry
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3 posted 2001-12-29 12:41 PM


Lyra, how beautifully romantic.
Keth

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4 posted 2001-12-29 12:53 PM


smiling...love does indeed live on! I know that now, and I thank you for the poetic verification!

Thank you for your warmth tonight, MC!

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5 posted 2001-12-29 07:17 AM


Oh this is lovely!!! Have you given this to your hubby? I'm sure he's thrilled with it!! Challenge well met!!

Into the library for this one.

Ariana
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6 posted 2001-12-29 07:45 AM


This is lovely and your husband must be very proud of you.  Something to be framed and placed on the mantle.  
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7 posted 2001-12-29 08:30 AM


This is so sweet!!! Especially the way you wrote these.....

You are my poem
you've written yourself gently into my heart

you are my song
you've sung your way softly into my soul

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

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8 posted 2001-12-29 10:08 AM


Lyra,this is so beautiful just like your marriage to David.TAKE CARE!
Love,Juanita

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9 posted 2001-12-29 10:18 AM


you are my forever
for me, you've spun lover's castles, ornate
our rainbow colored passion
builds bridges to tomorrow
across bridges of life, uncertain
we cannot know, the fates
=====================================

this is lovely....wonderful use of imagery, vocabulary, phrasing, and analogies to define the emote.
How lucky you both are.
Well done poetess Madame
Happy New Year.
jm

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there comes a point when youre not sure why youre still talking...
I passed that point long ago

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10 posted 2001-12-29 11:02 AM


OOOOOh  soo soooo nice and romantic.. Best wishes to you.   strbbux
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11 posted 2001-12-29 11:09 AM


*sigh* now this is love. He must be tickled to have such romantic words written about him. I love it. **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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12 posted 2001-12-29 02:30 PM




(smiles) Oh my gosh, this is sooooooo romantic, sweet Lyra, your love of your life is bound to love this forever! (kiss on cheek) We all wish you the greatest happiness, sweet friend, this is such a beautiful challenge! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lyra, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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13 posted 2001-12-29 03:16 PM


Wonderfully romantic piece!
AND congrats to you and your husband.
I didn't know you were newlyweds...wonderful!
~Hugs, Nancy~

*~ Wishing everyone a New Year filled with Peace & Love ~*

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14 posted 2001-12-29 03:49 PM


Lyra - Such a beautiful and romantic piece.  The whole thing is just so good from beginning to end.

Dave

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15 posted 2001-12-29 04:01 PM


You have met the challenge well with this lovely poem.

Deb

Madame Chipmunk
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16 posted 2001-12-30 11:03 PM


Sue, Martin, Keth and Serenity.....
thanks so much for your nice replies and I am glad that you enjoyed the poem.

Happy New Year to all of you.  

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

Madame Chipmunk
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17 posted 2001-12-30 11:10 PM


Sharon,... thank you for your reply and also for starting this absolutely LOVELY challenge. I don't know if you noticed but I made a correction in the last 2 lines.

Ariana,...Thank you so much for your reply too!
Parts of this poem were actually incorporated into our wedding vows, along with another love poem which I recently wrote.

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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Madame Chipmunk
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18 posted 2001-12-30 11:13 PM


Florence, Juanita and Floria......
Thanks so much my dear friends for liking my poem.
Just for that I vow to share my acorns with all of you.

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

[This message has been edited by Madame Chipmunk (12-30-2001 11:21 PM).]

Madame Chipmunk
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19 posted 2001-12-30 11:16 PM


Janet Marie, Karen and Noah.........
Thank you, thank you, thank you.....
from the bottom of my polished paws.

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

Madame Chipmunk
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20 posted 2001-12-30 11:18 PM


Thanks for the hugs, Nancy
and Dave and Deb...thanks, both of you for reading and replying to my poem.

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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