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ecrivan
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0 posted 2001-12-27 09:55 PM



In the land of spice and sand mixed
young lads had their eyes on worms transfixed;
if you caught one and rode its back
the other would herald you a jack.

A jack of distinction would ride giant worms
which would leave beneath the surface unchurned;
and give birth to batches of segmented delights
with pointy teeth and voracious appetite.


Tiny being a word relative to the holder
young lads would fain catch one when bolder,
in water they would drown their squirmy prize
its liquid exuded would surprise effects exercise.


Or exorcise surprising defects any season
for effects become defective for a reason;
villagers drinking tainted water extracted
would wander senselessly, their attention distracted.


[This message has been edited by ecrivan (12-27-2001 09:59 PM).]

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Shou-Lao
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1 posted 2001-12-27 10:21 PM



Dune in full flood.....

Well written piece.

Thanks for the chance to read

ecrivan
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2 posted 2001-12-27 10:41 PM


Some one who knows the author and his lands!
Thank you Shou, in this land of cyber talk
I have to expect replies fron people who not being science fiction buffs will ask me to explain...you saved me a discription.


GenXer
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3 posted 2001-12-27 11:12 PM


Martin - I am not a big Dune fan, but I have seen parts of the movie.  The ending I've seen a few times, when they are riding the big worms for the final attack.  Well done.

Dave

ecrivan
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4 posted 2001-12-27 11:24 PM


Dave,

Be surprised at all the inspiration one can get from a good read or a good film.


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