In You I See Me - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

0 posted 2001-12-27 10:41 AM

In You I See Me

The sunflower catches me
griped in the swirl
of high bluffs and laughter
and the fathoms of curl

That memory coats with
the perfect soft touch
that lingers in closed eye
believer in much

So technically magic
a pathway is built
that I wonder how time
in the past found the quilt

That covers the heart
with a warmth not earth bound
and fills all its pockets
with love’s eiderdown

You can drown in my eyes
in the depth of my sea
and I’ll willingly hold you
for in you I see me

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

1 posted 2001-12-27 10:43 AM

Martie, thank you, I mean thank you truly for a fine poem written beautifully. I loved this, absolutely!

iambic-
I am/Kathleen

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2001-12-27 10:58 AM

You can drown in my eyes
in the depth of my sea
and I’ll willingly hold you
for in you I see me
=============================

*sigh* ... good Lordy I love the way you write....
that verse is poetic gold Martie-girl.
this is lovely in its devotion and promise.

You're the hidden cost and the thing that's lost in everything I do.
Thats the way love is ... sky blue and black.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

3 posted 2001-12-27 11:05 AM

(smiles) Soooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, your loving words always touch our hearts, just as your love will forever see you in him. (sigh) You are sooooooo romantic, sweet friend, this is a true romantic classic! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

4 posted 2001-12-27 11:20 AM

*sigh* filled with tenderness and love. This poem touched my heart. How very beautiful it is. **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

5 posted 2001-12-27 11:29 AM

"love's eiderdown"

mmmmmMartie! That's a very evocative image--I love that! That one phrase alone says so much-- warmth, comfort and a soft place to land!

outstanding!

LngJhnAg
Member Elite

since 1999-07-23

Posts 3508
Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

6 posted 2001-12-27 11:58 AM

Martie - This is quite pretty and VERY sweet. I wish I hadn't read it today, because I am in "fine" form today, and just a touch too devlish to let anything slide by. Please forgive me... OK? Please?

As I drown in your eyes,
In the depth of your sea,
You surrender and become
A kitty kicker like me!

Now there are two of us
And I'm alone no more
I my search for kittys
To kick out the door!

OK - I know this was wishing for too much, but what are wishes for if not for the impossible dream?

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

7 posted 2001-12-27 01:15 PM

Martie~
Incredibly lovely imagery~
Softly YOU~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

8 posted 2001-12-30 04:31 AM

Martie-
   This is just gorgeous, and so softly penned.
   I'm loving it.
   Hugs,
   ~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

9 posted 2001-12-30 07:28 AM

I am not sure if SEA has seen this yet [my New Year's Resolution?...not to read all of the responses BEFORE I put mine in...too easy to get caught up in replicating replies!]...so anyway, where was my train of thought...OH YES! If SEA hasn't seen this one yet, I'll do what I can to keep it at the top!

kitkat
Senior Member

since 2000-01-11

Posts 878
Nova Scotia

10 posted 2001-12-30 10:24 AM

This was beautiful....*sighs*

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

11 posted 2001-12-30 10:37 AM

Martie,
A wonderful write with deep meaning. *L*

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

12 posted 2001-12-30 05:35 PM

"You can drown in my eyes
in the depth of my sea
and I’ll willingly hold you
for in you I see me"

this is so beautiful....

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

13 posted 2001-12-30 07:48 PM

So beautifully written, Martie...and as warm as that eiderdown quilt.

So technically magic
a pathway is built
that I wonder how time
in the past found the quilt

That covers the heart
with a warmth not earth bound
and fills all its pockets
with love’s eiderdown

Great work!

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

14 posted 2001-12-31 02:59 AM

The imagery in your writing is always amazing, and I found I had to make my reference to the sea as that is what comforts me personally. I loved this Martie.

~*~ Happy New Year ~*~
~* Carpe' Diem *~

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.