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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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foil and velvet... enticing eye... glistening in the twinkling lights-- it smelled and beckoned of entice... entrancing me with christmas spice... and I so hungry for a box that would not come complete with locks the last one underneath the tree-- surely it must be for me? And still I could, would not beleive... I read the tag, to my relief, written in a fancy pen... "From me to you..." in love, again... I didn't want to open it. I studied every crease. the paper, folded, "oh-just-so..." I wanted taste of memory. I wanted to remember this-- a gift of love's remembrance... In cherish, then, I hugged the box grateful you'd remembered me... sweet perish then as legs unlocked, in tears, I sank down to my knees. Oh my joy as heart beat wild, and with abandon of a child. I ripped the paper, pulled the bow, tissue tossed beneath the glow of twinkling lights of christmas tree this gift that waited just for me... and oh I guess, the joke's on me... and no, I didn't stop to weep-- for in the box-- dimensions deep? was emptiness for me to keep. window dressing for a show... the store front bought as presentation... on display the price I paid-- the starring role of your sensation. But even now it's in my keep the foiled box containing weep and every tear I store within? I save to stroll my cheek again... every moment's memory I placed inside there just for me-- a flow of sorrow here, on tap-- slow tomorrow, US---unwrapped. (still yet another repost...I am apparently exhausted beyond words...merry holidays in spite of blues, yes? Love to all.) [This message has been edited by serenity (12-24-2001 11:26 PM).] |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Thanks for sharing this serenity, even if it is a repost- it is new to me. Merry Christmas There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I don't remember this one, but it moved me....and it's painful, but oh you write so darn good....  Merry Christmas Serenity |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Beautiful my dear. At least you got the box. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
serenity, That was intense and impactful. Well done. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This is such an emotionl piece. I feel it all too well. Happy Christmas Sandra |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I don't recall having read this one before. I found it intense and enjoyed the read greatly, merry Christmas to you! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Karen, this is wonderful! I love it! Merry Christmas! ~Hugs, Nancy~ *~ Wishing you all a magical Christmas ~* |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
Another intriguing poem, indeed. This reminded me of a song by Living Color titled, Nothingness. I enjoyed reading this. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
I didn't see this the first time, so I'm glad to see it now. Very interesting write, had an unexpected twist to it. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Karen, this is sooooooo painfully beautiful, I know just how you feel and sometimes it's just difficult to re-open memories from mint condition. (sigh) My heart goes out to you, this is sad but so very beautiful! I hope you had the happiest holidays, sweet friend, I too don't remember this re-post but I love it!!! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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peaches73533 Senior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 981OK, USA |
I didn't see this the first time, but am glad I did now.Very sad but intriguing write.I always enjoy reading your writes. Peaches |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Serenity--The best thing about an empty box, is you can fill it! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Everyone is unwrapped today! Guess that's why they call this Open  Oh, God, hurry up 2002, I'm holding on here, this is a moving poem btw! Kathleen (Kay) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Popped in to thank you ALL for reading, hope you all had a good one! Love to you all, with my gratitude! |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Then the box was not wasted for it held the thoughts that give us the strength when we look beneath the glitter, for the precious moments are in our thoughts that mold us. Ahh, Serenity, good thoughts from the pain of what was to the gifts of what can be...very gentle smile with a holiday hug |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* well I can only say that I am very glad you shared this with us again because I never had a chance to read it before. My heart broke for you. **big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
serenity - the blues I read perhaps, but from an open heart, as I see. Happy holidays to you, with a smile... BC |
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