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John Yaws
Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 860
Texas

0 posted 2001-12-23 11:26 PM


Like ships which meet at sea, and pass-
Then vanish out of sight...
I met her in a truck stop
On a rainy, winter night...

I'd been driving, long and hard...
You have to, when you run.
And running is way of life-
For men who pack a gun.

I'd fought the rain a hundred miles,
And thought I'd grab a cup...
And maybe play the jukebox
It might just wake me up...

She was sitting in the corner,
The place I would have chose...
Her eyes green as the clover,
Her mouth a sweet, red rose.

I asked her, "Do you mind too much-
If I sit here with you?"
She looked at me without a smile,
And said, "I really do!"

She said, "We both have problems,
For me, my money's gone.
For you, it is quite obvious-
You've spent too long alone."

I said, "I guess you're probably right.
Forgive me that I asked."
She said, "I think I've changed my mind-
If you'll just let it pass."

We talked, it seemed like hours-
She walked me to the door.
When we embraced, she felt the gun-
That I always wore...

She said, "Your life's a hard one-
You're not the first I've knowed.
And if we both survive, big man-
I'll see you down the road."



© Copyright 2001 John R. Yaws - All Rights Reserved
Tennessee Angel
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since 2000-06-03
Posts 661
Tennessee
1 posted 2001-12-23 11:32 PM


Ah, I really like this one.  I love a poem that really tells a story!!  I felt like I knew this guy and could go on his journey with him.  Wonderful!
shoffswife
Junior Member
since 2001-12-23
Posts 38
KY, US
2 posted 2001-12-24 03:55 AM


awesome poem.  
Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
3 posted 2001-12-24 06:30 AM


John,
Is that a gun in your pocket...I'll see you further down the road. Good write. I liked the imagery of lost sopuls finding each other.
Kethry.

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Joe Lamando
Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 124
Massachusetts,USA
4 posted 2001-12-24 07:21 AM


John,
I really enjoyed the poem, the story.
Very nicely written.
Joe Lamando

Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
5 posted 2001-12-24 07:30 AM



A good write for a cowboy...Merry Christmas!

CondorSey
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since 2001-12-24
Posts 28
Dam-Nation
6 posted 2001-12-24 01:12 PM


Nice story telling.  You painted the scene very well.

Let's put the FUN back into Dysfunctional.

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