Impressions - not metered verse for a change

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Kethry
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since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

0 posted 2001-12-22 09:41 PM

Sirens wailing in the distance bemoaning fates…

Sub conscious awareness of them drawing closer…

Police pounding on the door
Words spoken, but not heard…
Tears falling, uncontrollably, without restraint…
Comforting arms, that do not…
Hand on the shoulder…guiding, leading the way
Voices in the background like distant thunder…
Rumbling, yet incoherent

Powerless…

Bright lights and gloomy thoughts
Nail biting, unaware, unstoppable…
Voices droning in and out
Faces in my view…
Concerned eyes…
Worried frowns…

Family appear
Speaking in hushed voices, asking why
I can't answer
Wrapped in grief

Powerless…

Waiting and numb
Cold, so cold
Arms hold closely, comfortingly
Tears flow together, mingling with unanswerable questions

A voice says…it will take time but he will be all right

Suddenly… sunshine
And the dawn of a new day

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-12-22 09:45 PM

the raw emotion from this tore at my heart.....oh Kethry....now you've made me cry.....

Startime
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since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

2 posted 2001-12-22 09:47 PM

Oh gosh.........this brought tears from the beginning. This poem is filled with heartbreaking emotion. **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2001-12-22 09:57 PM

Kethry, this write just reaches in, grabs your heart and squeezes! Excellent!
~Hugs, Nancy~

*~ Wishing you all a magical Christmas ~*

ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

4 posted 2001-12-22 10:23 PM

Your free verse is powerful..and what power do we really have over circumstance?Great write..puts you in the shoes of families that
mourn their losses and cannot be comforted

Madame Chipmunk
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since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

5 posted 2001-12-22 11:42 PM

I didn't know you did free verse too, Keth.
This is very sensitively written, and very sad.

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Marsha

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since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

6 posted 2001-12-23 09:06 AM

Keth darling sister of my soul, and collector of my tears. I could say that this is soso but I'd be lying if I did. You KNOW that I'm going to say I really love this poem it is UTTERLY utterly fabulous.

This writing shows the rawness and the emotion soooooo well darling girl, absolutely outstanding.
When you write free verse you soar darling, truly expressive

Absolutely Fantastic

This is far and away one of your best I love it. The hope at the end is sooooo uplifting, really really good writing darling sister of my heart. Did it make me cry, yes, will I beat you for it? No this is just sooooooooo fabulous

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy
It's a keeper for sure

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1

Nan

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since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

7 posted 2001-12-23 09:12 AM

This is a strong emotional piece, Kethry - It's so nice to see you posting more, btw...

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

8 posted 2001-12-23 10:42 AM

...and all this time I thought you were just another pretty face!

This is brilliant writing, Kethry...the best I've seen from you. The style suits you well and the wording is concise and very hard-hitting. I salute you, miss Keth

OLIAS
Senior Member

since 2000-06-20

Posts 1090
Pearl city Iowa

9 posted 2001-12-23 11:25 AM

A harrowing experince written with gripping power, wonderful write I enjoyed very much.

Regards,
Olias.

GenXer
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since 2001-12-15

Posts 583
USA

10 posted 2001-12-23 03:50 PM

Keth - It's amazing how family can make any problem seem a lot less worse then it really is. You captured feelings of angst, sadness, and hope very well in this well written poem.

As always, very good.

Dave

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

11 posted 2001-12-23 04:08 PM

(tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Lynne, this is so very sad, I hope soon he can heal from this heartwrenching pain! (sigh) Soooooo touching, dearest friend, this one had me crying! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lynne, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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