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Hallucination
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since 2001-03-18
Posts 419


0 posted 2001-12-22 07:40 PM


Hi Everyone,
I've been asked to write a song for a girl, who's about to sign a big record deal!!
But it's only if it's good enough, so I really need all comments and opinions on this...
If it's good/strong enough, or if it needs some uplifting etc...
Thanks.

Best Of Wishes

Brian.
"You Wish (Any Moment Now)"
© 2001 Brian Eggertsen, All Rights Reserved

V1:
I can read it in your eyes
Even though you say you're fine
It didn't take me long
To see that there's something wrong.

You say that he is the one
But I can see the love's gone
As you try to fake a smile...

C:
You wish
It was a dream
That you would wake up
(Any moment now)
You wish
That you could feel
Every drop of love
(Any moment now)
You wish
You could close your
Eyes and turn back time
(Any moment now)
You wish
That you somehow
Could just change your life
(Any moment now)

V2:
Pearls were always just your thing
So if you like diamond rings
Then why do you cry
Your self to sleep every night.

You say you think you're in love
Then you hide behind tear drops
while looking in the mirror...

C:
You wish
It was a dream
That you would wake up
(Any moment now)
You wish
That you could feel
Every drop of love
(Any moment now)
You wish
You could close your
Eyes and turn back time
(Any moment now)
You wish
That you somehow
Could just change your life
(Any moment now)

Instrumental break...
( Something like, All 4 one's, I Swear )

C:
You wish
It was a dream
That you would wake up
(Any moment now)
You wish
That you could feel
Every drop of love
(Any moment now)
You wish
You could close your
Eyes and turn back time
(Any moment now)
You wish
That you somehow
Could just change your life
(Any moment now)

© Copyright 2001 Brian Eggertsen - All Rights Reserved
RosePetal
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since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985
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1 posted 2001-12-22 08:07 PM


Did you post this the other day , it seems real familiar like I saw it on here the other day. Anwho, I like it, It seems like it will make a great song. I hope it all works out for ya

RP

amusemi
Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262
A State of Disarray
2 posted 2001-12-23 02:37 AM


Looks all right to me, but I am musically challenged... Got in a fight with that muse years ago and we haven't spoken in ages...I'm tellin' ya!!!
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