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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA 
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cafe i saw a tear drop onto a red tablecloth spreading its darkly stained bloody message in all directions it could have been disguised as a threatening raindrop had we been sitting outside or overlooked condensation from a water glass, but we had not yet been served i saw a tear that bled painfully slow and silent across a red tablecloth until it was forgotten beneath a cold snow white napkin |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Mike, these are powerful images and at Christmas time reminiscent of holly. The use of contrasting colour makes it brilliant. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
a moment frozen for posterity...and this poem rather haunted me... |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Wonderful imagery, reminded me for an instant of the repetitions used in American Beauty throughout the movie. Much enjoyed your words thank you. Regards, Olias. |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
Kethry...thank you, this is the first I have been able to write in months. I'm trying to kick my muse in the behind with some simple descriptions to start. Glad you enjoyed. faterider...thank you, I wanted to create a little mystery here and I think it came across in this one. Olias...thank you, I hadn't thought about American Beauty when I wrote this but I see what you're saying. Glad you enjoyed it. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
yes. . . this is a wonderful image. . . tears of red. . . but. . . where do they go?? where do we go when they fall?? good work here. . . nice to see you back. . .  -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
lovely use of the visual and the subtle message it makes..gives me an idea for developing other poems based on our sense of sight |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
Sven...thank you, its good to be back but the words still don't seem to come out as easily as they used to. Still trying tho!!! Where do we go when tears fall? Good question to be answered by the individual reader. Another question to ask is "Whose tear fell on the tablecloth?" ecrivan...thank you, glad you liked this one and glad that I could inspire. Packratmike |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
yup, the mystery did come through and i think that this poem presents a lot of possibilities--allows us to utilize our imaginations for a bit...kewl.. |
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