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Hallucination
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since 2001-03-18
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0 posted 2001-12-21 07:07 AM


Hi, everyone!!
I need some help/input
on what to write in the chorus.
'Cause I just can't seem to make it match
the rest of the lyric...
Thanks.

Best Of Wishes.

Brian
V1:
I can read it in your eyes
even though you say you're fine
it didn't take me long
to see that there's something wrong...

You say that he is the one
but I can see the love's gone
as you try to fake a smile...

Chorus:

V2:
Pearls were always just your thing
so if you like diamond rings
then why do you cry
your self to sleep every night...

You say you think you're in love
then you hide behind tear drops
while looking in the mirror...

Chorus:

Instrumental break...
( Something like, All 4 one's, I Swear )

Chorus:
Fade Out...

[This message has been edited by Hallucination (12-21-2001 07:09 AM).]

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2001-12-21 07:47 AM



You're on a good start.  I'd like to be of help, but my brain isn't quite functioning yet.  But a boost back to the top will help keep this in view of those who may be able to assist!

Larry C
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2 posted 2001-12-21 02:20 PM


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