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Soleil Noir
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since 2001-12-19
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0 posted 2001-12-20 10:33 AM




Observation

pink lips
slip
words through
ivory posts ~

whispered
thoughts
go
unheard ~

she is
pursuing,
perusing
a view,
with sighs ~

would you
look
at
him




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Opeth
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The Ravines
1 posted 2001-12-20 10:42 AM


I am not sure that I understood your poem, but I found it to be quite intriguing.
Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
2 posted 2001-12-20 11:54 AM


Soleil Noir,
An interesting write, enjoyed

Janet Marie
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3 posted 2001-12-20 12:48 PM


pink lips
slip
words through
ivory posts ~
====================
she is
pursuing,
perusing
a view,
with sighs ~
=======================

only a poet could come up with those lines...
very cool image in that first verse...and word play in the 3rd...
very cool writing, I enjoyed this unique, clever poem of perspective.
well done
jm
jm

You're the hidden cost and the thing that's lost in everything I do.
Thats the way love is ... sky blue and black.


Glenn Logan
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4 posted 2001-12-20 01:01 PM


Wonderfully subtle - oriental in feel -I love it!


Glenn Logan

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Florida's Foreverly Shores
5 posted 2001-12-20 10:13 PM


SoleilNoir~
Hmmmm ... something so familiar about your style~
Have we met in another life ?

I like this very much~

Happy Holidays to you~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Zukene_Chic
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Cali
6 posted 2001-12-20 10:16 PM


Great poem. I likes it a LOT!
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Deep in the heart
7 posted 2002-01-07 04:35 PM


hey look me over
I would taste your lips so pink
and hear your whispers

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Severn
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since 1999-07-17
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8 posted 2002-04-02 06:42 AM


Glad I stumbled my way across this..

K

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