why is it so 'two-dimensionally' cold?

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Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

0 posted 2001-12-20 06:53 AM

I wish I had known
that it was going to go
all so wrong --
for me

but, I am glad, you see
that it is going to be
all so right --
for you

why did they promise
that I was the golden boy,
and that I could never lose
that shine in my eyes

I wish I had seen
that those were all
such a pack
of lies

I wish I had known
...

did you ever realize
in those moments of choice
what were to become
of me

and did you even see
that it wasn't me alone
you were turning
away from

now, the rain drops down
in slow drips, upon
my anxious roofs
of uncertainty

I wish you had known
...

I think of you now
and all the sadness
falls away --
from me

wondering
if you knew why I have
lost the light in
my eyes

but, somehow I am glad
that questions never came
to haunt --
you

I'm glad you hadn't known
...

and I wish it weren't so
two-dimensionally
c o l d
o
l
d
!

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2001-12-20 08:07 AM

now, the rain drops down
in slow drips, upon
my anxious roofs
of uncertainty
=========================
this is an angst filled aching write Sudhir...
the formating added to its emote.
clever word play on the thought of two dimensional.
well done my poet of brilliance.
take care groovy-gator

jm

You're the hidden cost and the thing that's lost in everything I do.
Thats the way love is ... sky blue and black.

Nan

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since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

2 posted 2001-12-20 08:30 AM

Two dimensional cold is quite visually laden, my friend... This is an excellent write. Hoping all is well...

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2001-12-20 11:18 AM

Sudhir~
Emotively moving piece~

'I wish I had known
that it was going to go
all so wrong --
for me

but, I am glad, you see
that it is going to be
all so right --
for you'

Yet tempered with a bit of joy for someone else~ ... Nice~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2001-12-20 11:30 AM

Sudhir,
You should have brought her into the third deminsion. That's where all the warmth is. Excellent write. Enjoyed

Jamie
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since 2000-06-26

Posts 3168
Blue Heaven

5 posted 2001-12-22 06:34 PM

enjoyed as always my friend.

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

6 posted 2001-12-22 07:58 PM

(sigh) Such questions and unrest fills these heartaching words, dearest friend, I hope this isn't realted to a recent event! (big hugggssssss) You always write so wonderfully, dearest friend, we all love you so very much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sudhir, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

7 posted 2001-12-22 08:15 PM

You keep writing, Sudhir, and I'll keep reading. This is wonderful.

Kathleen (Kay)
"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

8 posted 2001-12-22 09:10 PM

hmmmmmmm. . . I'm wondering what exactly "two-dimensionally cold" is. . . could it be a chill that is both in the heart and the soul?

could it be the coldness between two people?? or. . . could it be the chill between night and day???

you make me think with this one my friend. . . and that's always a good thing. . .

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Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

9 posted 2002-01-28 03:22 AM

Thank you all very much... you are all so wonderful and kind in the most terrific sense of the word...

Regards,
Sudhir

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