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redwriter1
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0 posted 2001-12-19 09:29 PM


I'd forgotten how fun the challenges can be.

So here goes.

Think upbeat, think sexy, think a really kewl blues base line.

Ineed some continuing fun thoughts for this lyric, so before I write myself into a corner.. here is the first verse.


He's got me by the wings
my stomach's in knots
a head full of dreams
that's what he's got
my heart's in his hands.. among other things.....
(drum beat stops)
he's got me by the wings.....

any takers? if you dareeeeeeeeeeeeeee...
try to keep the same ryhme scheme.

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1 posted 2001-12-19 09:31 PM


I don't know if I can do this, but I like it a lot! Can't wait to see what the others come up with!!
redwriter1
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2 posted 2001-12-19 10:29 PM


I can't afford to let this get buried.. I need to work on this song tomorrow.. come on guys.. throw me a bone!! (smile)
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3 posted 2001-12-19 11:25 PM


HHHMMM, very interesting, I may try to take a crack at this one.

     Randy Meador

a life lived unexplored is a life not worth living.

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4 posted 2001-12-20 12:45 PM


i don't know much about songwriting..but i give this a healthy bump..
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5 posted 2001-12-20 01:12 PM


He's got me by the wings
                   my stomach's in knots
                   a head full of dreams
                   that's what he's got
                   my heart's in his hands.. among other things.....
                   (drum beat stops)
                   he's got me by the wings.....

hes got me heart and soul
im losing my breath
a heart full of love
hes got me till death
my loves in his hands..my heart he has stole

hes got me heart and soul


hes got me with his eyes
making me feel bare
undressing my skin
fingers through my hair
my body's in his hands,peeling my disguise

hes got me with his eyes


[This message has been edited by Victoria (12-20-2001 01:43 PM).]

redwriter1
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6 posted 2001-12-20 09:50 PM


whoaaaa.. nice work.. !!...

Anyone else?? (smile)

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