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redwriter1
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since 1999-07-22
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Franklin, TN

0 posted 2001-12-19 09:22 PM


Just got divorced a month ago so I have to get a few things out. (smile). I'm getting my life back, it's not easy, but the alternative was not acceptable.
Can anyone relate?

Any comments on this lyric would be appreciated.
Thanks guys!
Kay-lynn

> > ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
> > What's Wrong With This Picture?
> > ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
> >  V1
> > What's wrong with this picture
> > something's not right
> > the woman who's smiling
> > in that gown of white
,>the look on his face
as if he loves her

> > they both look familiar
> > so tell me what's wrong with this picture
> >
You can't see the bruises
> > under the white lace
> > behind that long veil
> > her make-up's in place
it captured a moment
> >but that's all that it was>

they still look familiar
but there's something wrong with this picture

> > If a picture paints a thousand words
> > they must be the ones I never heard
cus I don't hear a whisper at all

> >
He's out of the picture and she's comin alive
and for the first time.. in my life
the woman's who's smiling
she looks just like me
and I think that I like her
that's when I put down the mirror.
now I know what's wrong with this picture


copyright 2001 Kay-lynn Carew/Graham Andrews

© Copyright 2001 redwriter1 - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-12-19 09:29 PM


Mine didn't start till 2 weeks AFTER the wedding. I think the picture is looking great for you now!! (((hugs))) have been there....I'm glad you got out....this would be a fantastic song!!
redwriter1
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2 posted 2001-12-19 09:35 PM


well since I'm a songwriter.. tha'ts a very good COMMENT (smile).. Thanks hon!

Kay-lynn
**A dream is a wish your heart makes :)


Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11
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highways, & byways, for now
3 posted 2001-12-19 09:37 PM


redwriter1 - sounds like places I've been, only as a male... I write music also, well I attempt to. What type of music do you write, and do you play an instrument?

BC

redwriter1
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4 posted 2001-12-19 09:39 PM


a few of my songs are at www.mp3.com/kaylynn

I think you guys would really like my new one called "best part of me"..
It was really just a note to my daughter.. but it just.. well go listen and you'll see.

Thanks!!

amusemi
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since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262
A State of Disarray
5 posted 2001-12-19 10:16 PM


I've been out almost four years and I am always glad to hear of another survivor.  I know many who are still in and it is devastating to watch.  I hope that if anyone here is in that place will take strength from this peice and will realize that you can make it out.  Healing can be almost as hard as being in the relationship...hang in there, leaving will be the greatest thing you have ever done for yourself.

This struck a deep chord with me...no musical pun intended.  Thank you.

[This message has been edited by amusemi (12-19-2001 10:19 PM).]

Hypnosis
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6 posted 2001-12-19 10:21 PM


Its great that you no longer deal with such abuse, I am so happy for you!!!   I have a band,  so if anyone wants to give me some ideas for some lyrics, feel free to contact me, I'll be sure to give you credit!  Great write!

     Randy Meador

a life lived unexplored is a life not worth living.

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

7 posted 2001-12-19 10:41 PM


good to see you!   I'm not very good with lyrics, let me play around with it for a bit!!!!

Kathleen (Kay)
"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

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