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Mistletoe Angel
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0 posted 2001-12-19 03:00 PM




“HEAVENLY STAR”
by Noah Eaton & Bill Charles

~~~~
Look upon the star crowning our tree
What is it that you see?
In the blink of an eye under His golden manger
Where Mary cradles our loving Saviour

A star shines down, with its brightness
My eyes see, as they gaze
Into the heavens, and into His place
A babe in swaddling clothes, to amaze


I see eyes that shine with light
A boy with a tender warm face
He talks to angels through the night
Comforting His holiness with billows of grace

Eyes of radiance, guiding in the night
A male child, to smile with His grace
Soft words spoken, to the halo above
Bathed with her glow, at His birthplace


I see meadows of hands laid before His presence
Murmuring in mirth and praise
Stars, tears, and frankincense
The greatest love begins to raise

Colors of many hands, to worship one
many gifts to give, to our king
all that you have spoken of
a love of enlightenment, absolving


Yes, I see His love when I glance at this star
In His unconditional love we are feathered
This blessing that shall never mar
Protecting us from every storm we’ve weathered

I see a love also Noah, from this heavenly star
Unconditional, as you have written
And a blessing, to be for always
Knowing, He will never abandon…

~~~~

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (12-19-2001 03:00 PM).]

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1 posted 2001-12-19 03:03 PM



A wonderful duet from two worthy poets! How kind of both of you to grace our pages for the holidays with this Keeper...

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2 posted 2001-12-19 03:10 PM


A wonderful duet from both fine poets.  Enjoyed it much gentleman.

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

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3 posted 2001-12-19 03:40 PM


A beautiful duet.. I expected no less from such two talented men I enjoyed.

Hugs to you both,
Tara

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     - Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

Titia Geertman
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4 posted 2001-12-19 03:41 PM


Beautiful Duet

Titia

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5 posted 2001-12-19 03:52 PM


Christmas time, spirit of many wonderful poets and you two are an amazing duet that shows the light of Christmas very well

Love it!!!

Charisma

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6 posted 2001-12-19 04:23 PM


To coin a phrase...Gentlemen,  start your
engines...

You guys have won the race...nicely done...

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7 posted 2001-12-19 05:23 PM


What a fantastic collaboration you two, and many kudos to you.  I printed this one out and it will be read aloud to some older folks that are really going to enjoy it (of course I always mention who wrote it).  Merry Christmas and Happy New Year.
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8 posted 2001-12-19 05:25 PM


This is splendid! Enjoyed it very much you two! Nice work
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9 posted 2001-12-19 06:10 PM


Awsome job you two!  Together you work so well, you sound like one poet.  You collaborate very well!

Noelle

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10 posted 2001-12-19 06:17 PM


Noah and Bill, WOW!!  You two write so well together!
This is magnificent!
A wonderful duet by two worthy poets.
~Hugs, Nancy~

"A dream is a wish your heart makes..."

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11 posted 2001-12-19 06:22 PM


Bill and Noah oh my this is truly fabulous, you two have sung such a duet that the whole world would stand still to listen. Normally each of your writing is wonderful, united together in this duet it is
Absolutely Fantastic

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy
     
  

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1


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12 posted 2001-12-19 07:46 PM


Beautiful words from both poets. Thanks for this one I read it to my kids and they loved it.
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13 posted 2001-12-19 07:53 PM


Bravo!!!!  Well done!!!  Do it again...
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14 posted 2001-12-19 07:56 PM


Lovely writing from two talented poets!

Nathan

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15 posted 2001-12-19 09:46 PM


Noah - I have read all of the replies that were received by this writing. They are all most warm, kind, and have touched me very deeply. You my friend, made this one possible by your wonderful talent, as a poet, and a sincere and warm human being. When I wrote my words, they just flowed from the ones that you had written.

I thank you my friend, and everyone that replied to this writing, for it is special to me. Thank you again Noah... and Merry Christmas to you, and to all of you...

BC

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16 posted 2001-12-19 11:53 PM


Oh my gosh...another masterpiece. You two are just amazing...you blended so well to give us this vision of beauty. I love it. Very well done, Bill and Noah...**big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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17 posted 2001-12-19 11:58 PM


Noah & Bill,
Well boys...you done good. 'Tis the reason for the season.

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18 posted 2001-12-20 12:31 PM


Hey, Noah and Bill...

A duet?  Nice... back in Teen Poetry we called these "collaborations."     Funny how the terminology shifts from forum to forum.  In any case, I'm a big fan of these, I've written a ton of them in the past.  I find it's a great way to connect to a fellow writer.

Yours is no exception... the exchange from stanza to stanza illustrates and contrasts between two skills that I'm quite unfamiliar with (as the new guy to the forums), but can still recognize with some effort.

First off let me comment on the structure.  Neither of you restricted yourselves with a really strict syllable scheme or meter of any sort, and that's good for collaborations, it keeps two people from frustrating one another when writing.     Although the flow is a bit slow to start off, once I got into reading this I had no problems.  Because of the more irregular rhythm, more attention was drawn to the words themselves as a recited poem (rather than poetry that's sometimes better sung or stammered in bouncing iambs).  Gave it that small-time poetry pub feel, like someone was sitting on a stool, reading it out.  Very cool flow.  The rhyme scheme went back and forthies too, back and forthies, both of you using your own.  WOW!  I love back and forthies!  Go us!     (edit in - ok well it wasn't REALLY back and forthies, but something like that.  You guys switched it up a lot you know?)

Ok well in all seriousness, this piece is structurally sound.  The imagery you used also did a lot for the piece, and the simple concept to it kept it from over-complexifying itself and making it into a confusing mass of mumbo-jumbo or disagreeal between authors.

See you around, guys.  If either of you ever need a partner in penning, my email addy is on the yellow envelope icon...  

~Allan

[This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (12-20-2001 12:34 AM).]

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19 posted 2001-12-20 01:57 AM


Absoulutely awesome Noah....Well done to you both!
MrLeslie.

Kethry
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20 posted 2001-12-20 06:38 AM


What do you know...lights to shine in the darkness, and you two do it so very well
Keth.

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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21 posted 2001-12-20 08:46 AM


Very nice my friends - I enjoyed
Have a wonderful holiday

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