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Down Too Long
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Down Too Long |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
Down Too Long By: Noah Eaton 6/22/01 I’ve been down too long I can’t seem to sing a song Please don’t leave my heart bleeding in my lap I’ve been down so long Abandoned like a lost kitten Crying for someone’s loving comfort Feeling so lovelorn in a world so small to me In all this time I feel so insecure Night swimming in an ocean of broken hearts Losing myself in sorrow No raft to hold on tightly to No sight of seagulls to lead me to the coast My tired body freezing and aching Skin stinging with hypothermia My heart is so cold, my lungs are shivering I am struggling to swim, with this emptiness flooding my nervous system Half-a-mind crying, half-a-mind hurting A heart crying to see someone reaching a hand out to save me Tidal waves slowly pushing me closer Choking and hallucinating ever so much, dreaming of resting in peace I’ve been down too long, everything feels so cold Smiles shipwrecked in pirouetting hurricanes, rotating in my mind All that’s left is me Struggling to feel alive… |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
there are more hands reaching out than you know my friend. . .  this is a well written, although sad, poem. . . you really explore these feelings well here. . . it's hard being down isn't it?? but, the feeling soon passes. . . and we again put the halo back on, and the light shines even more. . . --------------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
keep your chin up Noah, and all will be fine  You are a sweet guy...I hope you are ok |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Time to come up and look at all the love around you, little sparrow. Partake of all the joy and love this season has to offer and you will not long be down. I know from experience that no matter your own problems if you help someone else with theirs your problems no longer seem as bad to you. Give it a try, my friend. You have a heart filled with love and you give it freely...the returns are priceless. **big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
So, pick yourself up by the bootstraps, stare life in the eye, smile, and walk off! The way before you is long and winding. It is too soon for you to grovel in the dust of life Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
Noah, I know life doesn't always go the way we would like it to, but please dont let it get you down. You make me happy and I can only hope that I do the same for you. Keep your head up and keep reaching for the stars! (((HUGS))) Love, Joanna |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
You are a very tender person and poet. Keep you head up and don't let nothing get you down. |
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Hypnosis Member
since 2001-12-02
Posts 325CO |
Oh, Noah, such a sad poem from one who has a happy and loving heart. I hope soon you are back to the skies, where you should be my friend! From your good friend Randy Meador a life lived unexplored is a life not worth living. |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Yeah well dont struggle any more I did that but now you'll have to pick yourself up and I'm sure everone here will help you. Hope you are happy soon I breathe the dust, the dust is me. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Come on Noah! You are so sweet and special to us all here....hope you get over this and bounce back to us soon.  Hugs, Nancy. "A dream is a wish your heart makes..." |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Noah This would have to be the saddest piece of writing I have read of yours. I felt your heart breaking and I felt the need to hold out my arms to comfort you in this time of need. You have given so much of yourself to others and brought so much joy to our lives that I believe now is the time for the tables to be turned and for you to receive all the love you deserve. Please know that you can contact me at any time if ever you feel the need to talk, I'll be there for you. I hope you find what it is you are looking for and happiness is restored in your loving soul. Take care my friend.....Sue Suetang |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Noah sweet boy, I've never known you sound so lost as if you feel forsaken. YOU aren't not only is there a whole army of poets who love you, HE is there for you. And HE will always be there, all you need to do is hold out your hand darling boy. Wonderful writing but it had me crying dear boy and you wouldn't want that, I look dreadful with red eyes. (And you don't really want that on your conscience would you?) You have talent, I haven't got a lot going for me except as decoration, so there ....... I knew I could raise a smile   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy   To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 |
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