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Sudhir Iyer
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0 posted 2001-12-17 06:07 AM


then and there
meandering in those
'yesterdays were special' dreams,
I stood,
static, feeling dry emotion
with eyes wet, sprinkling
miniature drops
of timelessness-kissed rain
falling through intense gazes
like thoughts grazing aimlessly
on drifting meadows
of lovely snooker-table green

and I felt snookered
by soft echoes of sweet nothings
still ringing
like whispers,
in the insides of my head
like last year's christmas bells

it is almost a year, but
those little jingling sounds
remind me of the emotions
that are held deep inside
in places where only the special
can see...

the common eyes are blind
for they don't see what's present
in the depths of the past
for they don't read the stories
that the inert stones tell

to them angst is just
a form of expression,
good enough for Radiohead to
write about, and the lonely to sing in
'Street Spirit' and 'Karma Police' lines

now I feel like a sheep
searching for my green grass
amongst deserted meadows covered
by sorry sheets of winter snow

probably the coldness is
getting to me,
and the smiles are
getting away,
and my lips once moistened
is now dry and withering
and all the moisturising cream in the world
is useless --
like futility of an over-abused idea

for it was not into my ear you whispered
but into my heart
for it was not my lips you kissed
but my soul

for it was not my face that had the smile
but my heart through my
once smitten eyes...


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Thanks Sharon, very much, for the quote.

The challenge is here : /pip/Forum7/HTML/000398.html

© Copyright 2001 Sudhir Iyer - All Rights Reserved
BloomingRose
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1 posted 2001-12-17 07:36 AM


This is very very good.

Deb

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2 posted 2001-12-17 07:54 AM


Wow! Sudhir you did a great job! I loved the flow of this. That challenge was hard and you met it with a wonderful poem. Thank you!    
Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 2001-12-17 08:11 AM


Sudhir,
for it was not into my ear you whispered
but into my heart
for it was not my lips you kissed
but my soul
Excellent.

Sudhir Iyer
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4 posted 2001-12-17 08:21 AM


Thank you very much Deb...

Thank YOU for the inspiring quote, Sharon...

Thank you, my friend, Seymour... incidentally the part you selected is the wonderul challenge quote by Judy Garland... your eyes did pick up the best part... for you are the mercurial artist...

Regards to all,
Sudhir

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5 posted 2001-12-17 01:41 PM


Wow what an excellent piece of poetry Sudhir.  Your use of words always amazes me, didn't want to "ditto" Seymour but those were my favorites lines.

~*~  May the spirit of this season live in your heart all year through ~*~


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6 posted 2001-12-17 01:44 PM


Sudhir, beautiful my friend.  You can relly weave those words wonderously

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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7 posted 2001-12-17 03:45 PM


you always knock my socks off Sir! This is really great.

RP

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8 posted 2001-12-17 04:03 PM


*sigh* absolutely beautiful. I love it. **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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9 posted 2001-12-17 04:25 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh my gosh, this is soooooooo beautiful, the wonderful words of Judy Garland echo all throughout your lovely response! (smiles) May you heart forever smile with hope and cheer as your eyes sparkle with golden tears! We all love you so much, sweet friend! (big hugggsssss) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sudhir, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Sudhir Iyer
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10 posted 2001-12-18 06:03 AM


all you lovely people... I thank you with all my heart for the kindest of words...

Regards to all,
Sudhir

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11 posted 2002-09-04 05:35 PM


Loved it. No alarms and no surprises is not an issue here. That must've been some challenge, Sudhir.

Mike

Sudhir Iyer
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12 posted 2002-09-05 08:19 AM


Thank you, Mike...

regards,
Sudhir

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