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tearpearl
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0 posted 2001-12-15 08:55 PM


Neon rain from a neon sky
magenta sand seeping through my fingers
every grain the face of a clock
time goes by, flowing as the river
to the open see
alive
everything around breaths and aches
of life
all it's pains and tortures
yet all is washed away
with neon rain
in the purple colored eyes of
twelve winged angels


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Janet Marie
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1 posted 2001-12-15 09:09 PM


Oh my this is so lovely...
wonderful employ of imagery and metaphor.
a beautiful bittersweet write!!

Its not like you to say sorry,
I was waitin on a different story.
This time I'm mistaken ...
for handing you a heart worth breaking.

Nickleback

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2 posted 2001-12-15 09:17 PM




(sigh) Sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend! Oh Oksana, your beautiful pen always paints such beautiful surreal visions and emotions! (smiles) I LOVE IT!!! You truly are an angel to us all, sweet friend, we all love you so much! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Oksana, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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Gaia
3 posted 2001-12-15 11:26 PM


Magenta sand and neon rain....
Interesting imagery, how life slips away.

Titia Geertman
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4 posted 2001-12-16 07:41 PM


As I missed your first post: Welcome tearpearl.

Great imaginary in this poem, I like it

Titia

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Hypnosis
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5 posted 2001-12-16 08:38 PM


Welcome to passions, a lovely poem i have read here, can't wait to read more!

   Randy Meador

a life lived unexplored is a life not worth living.

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6 posted 2001-12-16 08:41 PM


'yet all is washed away
with neon rain
in the purple colored eyes of
twelve winged angels'

A belated welcome to Passions...and, this is some very good writing...I love the image of these last few lines, and the whole poem...great write!

sp     

And did you know with the rain in your pockets,
you can change the weather...

rebekah33
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since 2001-12-13
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7 posted 2001-12-16 11:32 PM


Beautiful use of colors...Welcome to Passions!!!!!
-R.

"So stop and love and dance and live and laugh until you cry" Edwin McCain

Startime
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8 posted 2001-12-16 11:41 PM


What a colorful and beautiful vision you have painted with your words. **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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