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Dear Jack....I Wanted To Tell You...I Couldn't
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Dear Jack....I Wanted To Tell You...I Couldn't |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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Plain Envelope, typed address, no return address Addressed to me.. I opened it.... Addressed to me.. Dear Jack... I wanted to tell you about this letter last night. I didn’t have the courage, I just could not do it. I couldn’t tell you face to face. I didn’t want you to see my eyes, the tears falling. I want to tell you that I am leaving tomorrow. By the time you get this...I will be gone. Please don’t try to find me, I can’t bear it. I just want to leave, I have to leave. I have watched your face countless times. Your eyes shine with the greatest love, wisdom. Your smile gave me the most wonderful feeling. I could never stop looking at you. I cannot forget those nights alone, watching the flames. The moonlit swims at the seashore, sans clothing. The warmth of you near me, a blanket covering us. Your kiss...so tender...treasured so, not forgotten. I gave you my soul, you carried it...coveted it. I lent you my heart, you took it and smothered it. I gave you me in the warmth of your arms, we were one. I still sigh at the thought of those nights, the mornings. We sat over coffee, smiling...thinking erotic things. You reached out many times, holding my fingers. I felt your strength comfort me, protect me. But I was still afraid...afraid of losing you. I am leaving before I ever lose you...I must. I know I could never bear the loss, the emptiness. I cannot allow you to see my tears, flowing freely. I don’t want you to see my eyes, for they will tell you. I love you Jack....I wish I had your strength.... I will never forget you...time will keep you here. Though I love you, I am weak. Losing you would take away all I am. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
am I glad your name is not Jack  Kathleen (Kay) |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Gee...who's Jack? Poor guy. Great write Barry. ~Hugs, Nancy~  "A dream is a wish your heart makes..." |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* oh my gosh....I don't care who Jack is I am crying tears for him. Barry you touch me deeply with words that even when fantasy they hit hard. Shoot.....I just want him to be okay....how heartbreaking. **big hugs**   Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) I don't know who Jack is either, but my heart cries out to his sorrow and my heart goes out to him and I join you in your prayers! (big hugggsssss) I hope with all my heart he can tell how he feels to the recipient of this letter! (sad sigh) Poor Jack! (big hugggsssss) So sad but well-written, dearest friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Kay...no...this is not about me.. But my middle name is Jack... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Nancy...I used my middle name for him... He and I have a lot in common...but this was and is not about me...though I have felt feelings very similar to these from many, many years ago...How old am I?? Hmmmmm? |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Magnus, Good write I liked it.. it brought a lump to my throat.. understanding how both Jack and the woman must have felt.Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Karen...thank you...I think he will survive. He may find her again some day.... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Noah...thanx for your empathy...it is just a story poem...could be very real for someone...but is not... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thanx Tara...I am sure they both will survive Love can be such a tragedy... |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Your characters always hit me in the bottom of my heart. Such talent. You make it all too real. So glad this is not you. But many out there I'm sure. Peace and Poetry! Sincerely, Regina |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
Oh, I can identify with your woman character. When we have been burned in love we try to control those emotions we feel. We lack faith and trust and it is so tempting to brace ourselves for that inevitable pain we just know we are going to feel. She has to pay the piper on her own terms...because she believes she will no matter what she does. Great write!!! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Regina...coming from you...I am most pleased. I just pull them out and put them down.. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Amuseme.. YES..when we have been burned...Male or Female... We withdraw and have a very hard time giving love freely...Always that feeling that keeps us from doing it...even when it is true.. |
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misguided angel Member
since 2001-11-23
Posts 106Australia |
Magnus, such a sad write, you have touched me with this. Glad it's not you Andrea Summon the courage to step out of your familiar rut and suddenly many of those things which held you back will no longer have the power to do so. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
A sad and wonderful write. Though, I cannot help but be struck by the irony. She is so afraid of losing him, that she ends it, and, as such, loses him. When she may not have lost him otherwise. Silly girl If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Very good poem, just loved it Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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