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DarkAngelChelle
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since 2001-12-06
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0 posted 2001-12-14 12:53 PM


Foul, dirty desecration ...
halls filled with the vile stench
of a foreign presence,
invaded by one who doesn't belong.
Even stones are soaked with strange scent,
cracks permeated by a silent, seeping intruder.

Ceremonial fires slowly grow dim
in the unfamiliar ambiance.
Thick, choking uncertainty sneaks through,
snuffing out joyfully flickering flames,
killing the passionate music
which shadows had danced to
upon the walls.

The dying light reveals all,
a sin I was never meant to see.
Here, in consecrated space,
a haven was created,
but the veil has finally been lifted,
raising up the curtain of deception.

Laid bare, on the sacred altar of our bliss,
an unclean act of infidelity.
How dare you defy the sanctity of our love,
angering the gods that brought us together?
You made a mockery of desire's reverent rites,
soiling my heart's chaste offering.

My tears have too often watered the ground
on which we once knelt with souls of pure intent.
Nothing has grown out of fertile grief
except weeds of pain and betrayal.

Hallowed chambers now stink of corruption,
all treasures and urns broken,
shattered shards left to lie alone,
jagged reminders littering the floor.
Only a dangerous, cutting path remains,
ensuring no further trespass,
and condemning any future revival
in the cold, desolate ruins
of our abandoned temple.

~What is cherished most is what must be the hardest fought for.~

© Copyright 2001 Michelle Hamilton - All Rights Reserved
Larry C
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1 posted 2001-12-14 01:59 AM


Michelle,
But just when you give up all hope and see no signs of love. It will in fact grow and eventually flourish. But first to get past the pain...Sorry!

N orth Carolina Girl
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2 posted 2001-12-14 09:33 AM


DarkAngel,this is so very sad and heartbreaking.I hope if this is about you that things are getting better.
Merry Christmas!

Juanita

"always have a smile on your face it makes people wonder what you`re up to:

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
3 posted 2001-12-14 09:56 AM


Chelle,
Well you got that out of your system, good write.

DarkAngelChelle
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4 posted 2001-12-15 02:04 AM


Larry - Thanks for reading  .  And you're right ... love will eventually grow again, but getting past the pain is an obstacle that must be overcome first.

Juanita - Well ... this is pretty applicable to a situation I am experiencing.  It's probably a little bit stronger than what's really going on in my life, but things are looking up each day, and I only hope that all will be well soon.  Merry Christmas to you, too!  

Seymour - Yup, I really needed to get that one out of me.  I'm glad I did.  Thanks for the compliment.

~What is cherished most is what must be the hardest fought for.~

Poet deVine
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5 posted 2001-12-15 04:50 PM


Whew! This is full of anger..I hope whoever inspired it stays CLEAR of you!    
Charisma
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6 posted 2001-12-15 05:12 PM


it's good to write feelings down and to start with the healing, Very good translation from your feelings.
Well done  

Charisma

~*Theresia~*  

Madame Chipmunk
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7 posted 2001-12-15 10:11 PM


Poetry is so therapeutic, Chelle...and in addition to that, you have written a beautiful poem to share with all of us.
Well done!     

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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