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Madame Chipmunk
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Michigan

0 posted 2001-12-14 12:16 PM


I worship weekly at the mall
I bow to the hallowed storefront walls
and two-story concrete waterfall

winged creatures, carved in fine detail
grace the gates of stores, upscale
the guardian angels of retail

behold the salesmen so well oiled
selling trinkets and gargoyles
as they kiss the feet of patrons, loyal

a marketplace filled with smelly candles
loincloths, robes and strappy sandals
marauding hordes of teenage vandals

almighty stairs of moving stripes
escalate our spending heights
to ever more tempting sinful delights

savor the sinful stench in the air
from the food court at the top of the stairs
serving sacrificial fast food fare

heavenly choirs of cash registers sing
with pieces of silver offerings
rejoice rejoice rejoice, kaChing!!!

a solemn voice on P.A. system, says
"hark, a little soul is missing"
her parents hope the throngs are listening

an oasis of plants, green plastic lush
and ersatz marble fountains, plush
past which the pious shoppers rush

rise up, rise up, and hear the call
lift up thine eyes, and see the scrawl
behold the writing on the wall

the signs upon these sacred halls say
"big sale next week
come one, come all
thy bargains await thee at the mall"



[This message has been edited by Madame Chipmunk (edited 12-14-2001).]

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DarkAngelChelle
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since 2001-12-06
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Kansas
1 posted 2001-12-14 12:31 PM


Hehe!
I thoroughly enjoyed this one, Lyra.    It made me giggle to think of the classical Greek architecture and images meeting modern-day fashion and cappucino bars.  

~What is cherished most is what must be the hardest fought for.~

N orth Carolina Girl
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since 2001-12-04
Posts 962
NC,USA
2 posted 2001-12-14 09:41 AM


Lyra,this doesn`t sound like our mall at all.I would rather go to K Mart anytime. But to tell you the truth I just love to shop.We went last night to pick up some toys for Toy for Tots and I had to hide them from Chase.TAKE CARE!



Love,

Juanita

"always have a smile on your face it makes people wonder what you`re up to:

Son Netier
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The Garden State
3 posted 2001-12-14 09:54 AM


So wonderfully mirthful, a delight to the reader

Bill

vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...
4 posted 2001-12-15 02:31 AM



Madame Chipmunk-
   LOL...love this!
   You've described the experience well.
   Hugs,
   ~Vicky


"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Mistletoe Angel
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5 posted 2001-12-15 03:07 PM




(giggles) Sooooooo creative and cute this write is, sweet friend! (smiles) Clearance saile, everything must go!!! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so very much, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lyra, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Startime
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Posts 5918
Canada
6 posted 2001-12-15 03:13 PM


*giggling* hey...I think I was there yesterday...but the crush was so great I couldn't see a thing so I went home until an early morning trip could be arranged. LOL I love it. So well done. **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Marsha
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7 posted 2001-12-15 03:28 PM


Lyra darling girl this is utterly wonderful.

I really and truly adore this. As always your writing is insightful and witty. This is a keeper for certain. I know just what you mean too. It sounds just like our shopping mall

    
Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy
    

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1


Madame Chipmunk
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Michigan
8 posted 2001-12-17 12:03 PM


Thanks Son and Chelle,
Its the mall, alright...and its probably the way people shopped in ancient times also.
The ancient Greeks invented everything else, so they probably invented shopping malls also.

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

Madame Chipmunk
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Michigan
9 posted 2001-12-17 12:06 PM


Juanita...it sounds like you and your family have such a wonderful time at Christmas...
I have often wished I could celebrate it without guilt.
In fact, I've just written a poem about that...stay tuned!

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

Madame Chipmunk
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Posts 8296
Michigan
10 posted 2001-12-17 12:09 PM


Vicky and Noah...thanks so much for enjoying my poem...Now, go finish your shopping odysseys
              

and have a great Christmas!

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

Madame Chipmunk
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Posts 8296
Michigan
11 posted 2001-12-17 12:14 PM


Karen and Marsha....thanks so much for your replies....
Only 8 more days to Christmas...
You had better get back to that mall, right away.



copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks


[This message has been edited by Madame Chipmunk (edited 12-17-2001).]

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