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Martie
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0 posted 2001-12-13 06:18 PM


You are There, Here with me

Once upon a time is ever
Minutes unticking dawning stayed
In my vision all the oceans
Wading footsteps start cascade.

Across a prairie torched in sundown
Drinking lips of rivers free
Peaceful following of a heartbeat
You are there, here with me

In the mirror of reflection
Scruff kneed climbing up a tree
Popping bubbles of reminder
You are there, here with me

Could my inkwell touch creation
Pierce the truth of always love
You would be the one with answer
Gleaned from sky climbed search above

So I wait here in the stillness
Opening all my depth of be
With joy to find what I was knowing
You are there, here with me.

[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 12-13-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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1 posted 2001-12-13 07:44 PM


* reading thru tears and awe ... shaking my head and lacking the words to tell you just how awesome this is...........

rest assured....I'll be back..... *s*

Janet Marie
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2 posted 2001-12-13 07:56 PM


Once upon a time is ever
Minutes unticking dawning stayed
=====================================
Across a prairie torched in sundown
Drinking lips of rivers free
======================================
Popping bubbles of reminder
You are there, here with me

Could my inkwell touch creation
Pierce the truth of always love
You would always know the answer
Of this sky climbed search above

=======================================
Opening all my depth of be
With joy to find what I was knowing
You are there, here with me.
========================================


From that poetically perfect opening line...
to the end of this angel inspired verse...
you had me smiling at your gift and holding my breath.

ONLY YOU would come up with this image

Across a prairie torched in sundown
Drinking lips of rivers free



and this....

Could my inkwell touch creation
Pierce the truth of always love


YES!!!!!!!!!  you just did with this.
Remind me to send Lady a thank you note for this challenge....
exquisite write Martie  
(IWIHWT)  

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3 posted 2001-12-13 07:58 PM


I'm just gonna nod my head and point to Janet...."what she said"   this is soooo wow!!!  
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4 posted 2001-12-13 08:10 PM


Sitting here speechless, pointing to JM's reply and muttering "ditto".  Martie...this is exquisite, remarkable,...sorry, I just can't find the words strong enough to describe what you have done to me with this write!!  You have met this challenge with incredible insight and sense of wonder!
    ~BIG hugs to you sweet friend, Nancy~  

"A dream is a wish your heart makes..."

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5 posted 2001-12-14 01:02 AM


Make that three "dittos" oh my gosh Martie!

~*~  May the spirit of this season live in your heart all year through ~*~


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6 posted 2001-12-14 03:00 AM


A very beautiful challenge met!

Your words run deep inside my soul,
An imprint of the imagery,
I am awestruck of your final goal,
As your words are there, here with me.

HUGS   Just beautiful!  

Ter.

Alone in the dark, through my thoughts comfort I do seek, through my words I find peace.

Sudhir Iyer
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7 posted 2001-12-14 05:39 AM


...(hushed silence)

regards,
sudhir
P.S. you are the POET

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8 posted 2001-12-14 08:47 AM



Nodding my head at SEA who's pointing at Janet Marie, what they said...

This is absolutely awesome, and I know Lady is going to put this in a very, very special place....

like me!

Martie...remind me never to post a challenge, because you just take and whomp behinds when you pick up your pen...

Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 2001-12-14 08:58 AM


Martie,
I can't outdo JM's writing art.
But you have a place in my heart. *L*

Nan
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10 posted 2001-12-14 09:18 AM


Indeed... This is lovely, as usual, dear Martie..
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11 posted 2001-12-14 10:02 AM


Oh wow! This is just beautiful, Martie. Sounds like you met this challenge well.
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12 posted 2001-12-14 10:30 AM


*library*

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13 posted 2001-12-14 10:34 AM



Martie.  I wish you could hear the sigh.  A sigh of content, of knowing that when one reads your writings, they feel emotion that only real poets can elicit from the reader.  This is a marvelous addition to the treasure that is growing from the words, You are there, here with me.

A Keeper.  Always.  Thank you.

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14 posted 2001-12-14 10:52 AM


Oh my gosh...this beautiful poem sings...It is a melody of perfection. I read it three times and am left in awe of how perfect a poem it is. Thank you for writing it for the challenge. I love it. **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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