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Undertow |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace 
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Undertow you pawned diamonds and turned them into water coming back from a vacation where you drank a different liquid you took me to the edge of the beach as I watched you swim warning me of the sharks never letting me get my feet wet had I have known your future I never would have saved you as you made excuses for the swim I should have let you drown yes, the diamonds are gone they are the grains of sand that now wash away from shore melted in the undertow "I have already paid for all my future sins." Sade...(King of Sorrow) |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
diamonds are not forever, I suppose |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* sometimes we find the treasure was not what we had thought it would be. This poem had me thinking of things that have happened in my own life. My heart feels this deeply. **hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
had I have known your future I never would have saved you as you made excuses for the swim I should have let you drown Excellent conflict here. Very good. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Helen, I know just how you feel, for some treasures we find in life may seem like riches, but in the end, they just don't sparkle like they used to! (sigh) Always listen to your beating loving heart, for the authentic diamonds of life are found only in what you cherish and believe in that makes you happy! (sigh) We all love you so much, sweet friend, you are a true treasure of these pages! (kiss on cheek) BRAVO!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Helen, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
There is always so much within the weaving of your words. I love this! Your storm of assumption feeds anger I am calm enough to hold inside. Don't pretend to know me if you've never put stretched out your heart with since |
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