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Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2001-12-12 11:04 PM

Silence haunts me as I sit before a window.
Though the view beautiful, my eyes feel pain.
Hours of remembering cast shadows over me.
I hurt so when you are not here.

Missing you is like a thousand needles in me.
Not seeing your eyes, I see only darkness.
Your voice gone, I hear only echoes of nothing.
My cries for you are unanswered, unheard.

Late is the day, my bones weary, mind tired.
Though my heart is strong, my love flounders.
Cells by the millions die within me
A dreamless sleep ages me.

Can you not call me, tell me you care?
Is this silence the beginning of an end?
Erase my name from within your heart?
For losing you is dealing me my demise.

Come into my day again, water the lonely rose.
Let my arms embrace you, spread love.
Allow my touch to sooth you, comfort you.
I, like a rose, will wither and die without you...

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2001-12-12 11:18 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh Magnus, such thoughts of sorrow fill these words, but I know deep down with all my heart that with a loving faithful heart like yours, it will never happen! (sigh) She will always love you, and your love always shines for her in your words! (sigh) So sad but beautiful, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Magnus, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

2 posted 2001-12-12 11:23 PM

Noah...just stretching the wings on my pen.
Not feeling this right now...I just enjoy
getting to that level and letting it fly...

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

3 posted 2001-12-13 01:54 AM

Good to know this is just flying...you captured the feeling well.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2001-12-13 11:45 AM

Well this aches off the page...
great use of metaphor and imagery..
and makes it even more impressive that you can write it this melancholy and not be in that place...
well done poet sir
jm

Its not like you to say sorry,
I was waitin on a different story.
This time I'm mistaken ...
for handing you a heart worth breaking.

Nickleback

rosepetals25

Member Elite

since 2000-05-31

Posts 3076
PA

5 posted 2001-12-13 12:20 PM

Magnus,

I have only been reading your writings for a the past week or so.. and I'm so glad I started. This poem express so clearly the emotions you try to get across... well done

Hugs,
Tara

"My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read"
- Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

6 posted 2001-12-13 12:21 PM

This is such an impressive work...

Thanks for sharing...

Regards,
sudhir

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

7 posted 2001-12-13 01:18 PM

*sigh* such a heart filled with tender and romantic feelings. I love the way you express yourself and make me feel as I read your poetry. **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

8 posted 2001-12-13 02:19 PM

Yes Duncan...I enjoy getting deep into my
emotions and putting them down like this
poem...I know them because I have felt them
at one time or another...Many months at
sea onboard a ship brings out many emotions
which are never forgotten.

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

9 posted 2001-12-13 02:20 PM

Thank you JM...I tried to write something
very strong and emotional...I believe your
words have confirmed my writings...

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

10 posted 2001-12-13 02:21 PM

Tara, thank you very much....I will try to
keep you entertained...I love doing that.

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

11 posted 2001-12-13 02:22 PM

thank you Sudhir...your comments are very
much appreciated.

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

12 posted 2001-12-13 02:23 PM

Karen...any time I can write and make you or
others feel good from my writing....it gives
me the greatest high....thank you lady.

Son Netier
Member

since 2001-12-11

Posts 116
The Garden State

13 posted 2001-12-13 02:41 PM

I know this feeling that you expressed so well, I enjoyed reading your poem

Bill

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

14 posted 2001-12-13 02:58 PM

Thanx Bill....and I enjoy your words as well.

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