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Martie
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0 posted 2001-12-12 06:51 PM



Through the Eyes of Rhapsody

How do I play this sentient song
that is like cotton sheets
sweet with sunshine’s perfume
and cooled by evening

It has no measure or definition
only it is dew wrapped
and dimpled from fairy wings
and you can hear it breathe

Take the Johnny-jump-up
in the crack of the busy highway
nodding with the passing car
testing the purity of innocence

Mix in dawn
pouring through a tiny hole in the shade
and touching the babies fuzzy head
with a  halo of light

Then add the tiny gray catfish
quick and precise through twilight water
in and out of mossy fabric
consuming daylight’s last bejeweling

Then touch it all with just a pinch
of tomorrows mellow dawn
and toss the sound of morning dove
with an apple’s crisp bursting flavor

Then take a smile
and tuck it soft
into the folds of velvet dreams
and feel a lover’s touching tender

Now all the wonder that is a minute
warm in bosomed sweet fragrance
and loosened hair pouring across the pillow
has caught each breath in passion’s touch

and that is a beginning

___
a repost

To decorate this aging
is no longer possible, but the wind
knows, just moaning in the afternoon
changes the listener.

© Copyright 2001 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Irish Rose
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1 posted 2001-12-12 06:53 PM


Martie, this is the kind of writing that just fills me with delight for the written word, you know?  Thank you for a splendid write!

Kathleen (Kay)
"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

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2 posted 2001-12-12 09:00 PM



Rarely do I find any particular lines that are the favorite, as they all lead from one favorite to another, but today, this stuck out a little more...
quote:
Then take a smile
and tuck it soft
into the folds of velvet dreams
and feel a lover’s touching tender



See?

Madame Chipmunk
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3 posted 2001-12-12 11:18 PM


I just love the imagery in this poem, Martie and the way you play with those words.
Its luscious!

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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4 posted 2001-12-13 12:02 PM


Oh I know I have said this before but each poem of yours simply amazes me Martie - I wish I could think with that descriptive thinking but for only one poem, just one!  You truly have a gift of using the English language to draw a picture like a "master".  Beautiful!

~*~  May the spirit of this season live in your heart all year through ~*~


Sudhir Iyer
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5 posted 2001-12-13 12:09 PM


The title... The R word again.... so many times, have I tripped on that word... Rhapsody...

but then I read on through, and read on through and through... WOW

Truly MARTIEn...  

Regards,
sudhir
P.S. I am a "fan" --- an martieN fan

Joe Lamando
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6 posted 2001-12-13 02:54 PM


Martie,
You've brightened my day
lightened my way
with this lay
Joe

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