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Hell’s bells
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Hell’s bells |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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Crack by crack I edge my way to each new toehold, proceeding sometimes only with the help of an outreached hand. Daylight I began to envision but hatred’s roots tighten around my ankles, standing me still...and then starts the backwards pull. Momentum scrambles me into the darkness, I try not to swallow fighting each breath lest I gag on the blackness. Saturated, my scream clinched silent by teeth held tight. My movements stifled for fear of sliding further With the last glimmer I reach for my eyes, but they are open. There is nothing left, no want to go on. No hope. Into the abyss a little further from reality’s grasp I slide. In my pitch-black existence with all my senses on the brim of going over, I can’t be sure, but I think I hear distant bells tolling… |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
WOW!! How frightening!! the picture you paint here is so VIVID! Excellent writing  |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) Such pain and despair fills these sad words, sweet friend, my heart cries out to you! (sad sigh) Never give up the fight against sorrow, always listen to your loving heart and believe in yourself and soar to the bells of heaven and hope! (sad sigh) We all love you so very much, sweet friend, my heart and prayers are always with you, and we are always here if you need someone to talk to! (big hugggssssss) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Carol Luna Member
since 2001-12-06
Posts 55 |
I hear these bells loud and clear, what an intense write! Carol Luna |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Oh.... you snuck this in on me... and now I'm going to miss my bus because leaving without replying simply isn't an option. *S* feeling guilty yet? *G* This leaves me completely awestruck, lady... and heartbroken that you're experiencing the feelings you've woven into such a powerful poem. The poem is simply fantastic... one of your best. The pain is wrenching. I applaud the poet and hurt for my friend. So many of us have a nemesis... it may be hatred or addiction or fear or something uniquely ours... that exercises undue control, always trying to snatch us back into the pits just when we think we're finally free - you've written so well of the despair felt when once again, we have to recognize its power. But yanno what? *S* My bet's still on the prisoner... and my hopes hug her tightly. *S* So hang in there!!! Love you! [This message has been edited by suthern (edited 12-12-2001).] |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
gotta say thank you....and guess that's all, some days are best left in silence... and suthern...thank you...but today finds the prisoner quite a bit further into the abyss... |
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