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Open Poetry #17

The Eternity of Us

Lucie
Senior Member

since 1999-06-20

Posts 1077
Houston

0 posted 2001-12-12 11:48 AM

Our time is short,
but then, it always was.
Years, months, days, minutes,
just a drop of eternity.

To watch you,
when your not aware that I am.
The way the sunlight touches you
like the warmth of my hand.

To hear your voice,
like cool silk it surrounds me.
Warming as it caresses my skin,
until I no longer feel alone,
I become one with you.

Your eyes, searching,
like a soft summer breeze
they move over me.
Seeing me as no one else does,
filled with love for you.

You whisper,
your voice lost
in the sounds of life.
And yet,
I hear you, because I am you.
We are one, and I am frightened too.

Remember me with a smile on your face, or please don't remember me at all.

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

1 posted 2001-12-12 11:53 AM

You whisper,
your voice lost
in the sounds of life.
And yet,
I hear you, because I am you.
We are one, and I am frightened too

......
This is great writing...

regards,
sudhir

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

2 posted 2001-12-12 12:16 PM

Hi Lucie, remember me? I used to be the Lady of Shallot LOL
I really enjoyed this

Kathleen (Kay)
"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

aries_luv_ppl
Senior Member

since 2001-09-20

Posts 1448
Universal Mind

3 posted 2001-12-12 12:20 PM

I like the imagery, the metaphors shown in the poem. So beautiful!

Nice to meet you. This is my first time read you poem.

~Flower lasts so an hour, yet spring will brings her back to life again.
~Just when I thought it is too far away, opportunity knocks the door

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