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Startime
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0 posted 2001-12-10 05:24 PM


Emotions Tumble

Deep within her own thoughts
still not really focused
just letting them flow directionless
much too afraid to let one surface

Emotions tumble over each other
swaying back and forth from high to low
leaving behind a hollowness
with a sense of loss and confusion

Sun warms the face
not reaching the heart
only shining on the surface
missing the cold emptiness

Thoughts stop where the pain resides
starting tears that fall from the heart
making their way to flow from eyes
now blind to all else around

Emotions tumble out as understanding
comes to a heart who would not hurt
one who has become so precious
she pulls away the heart still given

Karen Torbiak ©




Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

[This message has been edited by Startime (edited 12-10-2001).]

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Deep in the heart
1 posted 2001-12-10 05:26 PM


Indian-giver

Sadly beautiful and revealing.  I loved it!

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Startime
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2 posted 2001-12-10 05:29 PM


To be praised by you is a precious gift indeed. I am glad you found it revealing. Thank you...

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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3 posted 2001-12-10 05:29 PM






(big hugggsssssss) Oh Karen, it saddens me to see you feeling like this; I pray that your tumbling emotions will soon again rise to the everlasting scream of joy and faith! (sigh) May your loving heart shine! (kiss on cheek) My heart is with you always, sweet friend! You have suhc a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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4 posted 2001-12-10 05:31 PM


What a beautiful yet sad write! Your heart, your soul I read when you write. You have quite a talent to express your emotions!

May love be your sunshine, your warmth and your comfort. May the cold and sorrow escape your being, leaving you with happiness and joy, a feeling you truly deserve.
HUGS  
Ter.

Alone in the dark, through my thoughts comfort I do seek, through my words I find peace.

Startime
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5 posted 2001-12-10 06:00 PM


Noah...thank you...I just get too emotional sometimes...it will pass and I will survive...I always do..**hugs**


Rogue24...your words felt like a prayer to me. Thank you, the gentle feelings you convey are much welcomed. **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Carol Luna
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6 posted 2001-12-10 06:23 PM


I didn't find it revealing particularly, only very soft, very sad.....such a reflective piece.

Carol Luna
~give me peace, no matter what the cost~

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7 posted 2001-12-10 07:52 PM


Karen,you have a such a wonderful talent expressing your feelings.
Juanita

[This message has been edited by N orth Carolina Girl (edited 12-10-2001).]

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8 posted 2001-12-10 07:56 PM


It can feel so emotional sometimes, this is well done, and the feelings understood.
Take care of yourself.
Sandra

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9 posted 2001-12-10 08:01 PM


Sun warms the face
not reaching the heart...

THAT is poetry! Beautiful writing, Karen  

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10 posted 2001-12-10 08:06 PM


My dearest and lovely poetess Lady Karen, your words here are so very powerful and express the emotions of a very beautiful woman and loving human being, Loved this! Your knight, friend, and poet, always and forever! Sir Robert
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11 posted 2001-12-10 08:19 PM


Karen, a beautiful write as always, yet sad.
WoW!  You have your very own knight?!
Sir Robert..*see above   *
That's enough to make any woman smile.  
Hugs, Nancy  

"A dream is a wish your heart makes..."

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