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OWG
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0 posted 2001-12-10 08:10 AM


daughter of winter
born during the blizzard of 69
she climbed empty trees
as a child
played with the ice voices

smoked the pipe of piece
at treaty rock
with a cowboy fan
drank Jack 'til dawn
made love in his cherokee

she carried his seed,
great warrior he was,
quarterback
at the university
where she worked tables pregnant

while he studied law
she gave him her youth
and three sons
with midnight eyes
and raven hair

he gave the kids back
in a divorce last year
and payments
on a worn out jeep
and empty house

she smokes and drinks now
makes wolf woman love
with pale skinned strangers
ghosts of the long knives
that took her land

she rents them her valleys by the hour...


©OWG (she works the hotels in Eastern Wa..has hollow eyes.....one from the road)



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SEA
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1 posted 2001-12-10 12:31 PM


very sad, realistic write  
Irish Rose
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2 posted 2001-12-10 12:35 PM


Yes this is very sad.  We see people and we wonder....what's behind the eyes....

Kathleen (Kay)
"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

N orth Carolina Girl
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3 posted 2001-12-10 12:46 PM


OWG,this was so sad and heartbreaking.

Juanita

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Janet Marie
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4 posted 2001-12-10 04:46 PM


very cool writing here....impressive use of imagery and story telling in verse.
well done poet sir.
jm

Its not like you to say sorry,
I was waitin on a different story.
This time I'm mistaken ...
for handing you a heart worth breaking.

Nickleback

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5 posted 2001-12-10 04:53 PM




(tears fall down my cheeks) Oh OMG, this is so very sad and my heart cries out to this poor heartbroken girl in despair. (wipes tears) I feel this pain will always be afflicted to her, and I pray with all my heart that true love can reach out to her and heal her pain somehow! (sad sigh) So very sad, sweet friend, my heart and prayers are always with this girl! God Bless her and you always! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet OMG, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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6 posted 2001-12-10 04:55 PM


Born in 69?  She has lived a long lifetime in these few years.  So sad.  Joyce
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7 posted 2001-12-10 08:24 PM


This is very very strong. I could feel her sadness.
Sandra

OWG
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8 posted 2001-12-10 08:38 PM


Sea, thank you for your review....and for your reflection.

Ms Rose, her eyes are cold her jaw is set bitter firm...when she told her story I felt the icy winds from the cascades cut through my skin.  Thank you for your read and comments.

NC Girl, thank you for the time and gentle thoughts of reply.


JanMarie, thank you, I appreciate you.

Friend Noah, your gentle spirit is a blessing to all who wear sad clothing.

Joyce..she is so young and yet so worn out....thank you.

Catmoon, I feel her sorrow in the winter winds..like a siren song of sadness....thank you so much for the read

Enchantress
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9 posted 2001-12-10 08:54 PM


Enjoyed the read.  You paint a very vivid, sad, picture.  
Well done!
~hugs, Nancy~  

"A dream is a wish your heart makes..."

Sunshine
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10 posted 2001-12-10 09:10 PM



I know this girl...Your road trip provides much to see....record it well....

Startime
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11 posted 2001-12-10 09:28 PM


Heartbreakingly real. My heart goes out to her. It sounds like hope no longer shines in her eyes or heart. **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

doreen peri
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12 posted 2001-12-10 10:29 PM


you are a fine writer.......
Soleil Noir
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13 posted 2004-06-16 09:12 AM



It's nice to see this one
again...

Susan Caldwell
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14 posted 2005-11-25 02:36 PM


Wonderful sad and well worth the reread.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Sunshine
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15 posted 2011-07-27 01:37 PM


And your poems remain remember-worthy...


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