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RosePetal
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0 posted 2001-12-09 11:15 PM


A breath of fresh air
Invades me when I'm alone
Released from just you
As If you are my window
Letting in sunshine of life

© Copyright 2001 Joanna - All Rights Reserved
Startime
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1 posted 2001-12-09 11:16 PM


Absolutely beautiful. I love it. **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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with you
2 posted 2001-12-09 11:17 PM


awwww   this is wonderful  
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3 posted 2001-12-09 11:20 PM


Joanna,

   Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!!!!!! Omg this is just sooo sweet   I love it!!


Hugs,
Tara  

"My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read"
     - Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

MyEnchanted_Melody
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across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.
4 posted 2001-12-09 11:30 PM




Such a lovely piece....

and here is another rainbow for you..




Thank you
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

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5 posted 2001-12-09 11:30 PM


Very sweetly wrote! Life with love doesnt get any sweeter! HUGS!  
Ter.!

Alone in the dark, through my thoughts comfort I do seek, through my words I find peace.

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6 posted 2001-12-09 11:40 PM


Just beautiful. You do these very good.
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7 posted 2001-12-10 12:03 PM


*sigh* Yes...I have seen your writing grow, and I love it.  

Your storm of assumption feeds anger I am calm enough to hold inside. Don't pretend to know me if you've never put stretched out your heart with since

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8 posted 2001-12-10 08:10 AM




(kiss on lips) Soooooooo beautiful! (kiss on lips) With every breath may we share a love so divine! (kiss on lips) Mmmmmmm...I love you so so much, sweet rose, you will always be the girl of my dreams! (kiss kiss) You have such a beautiful heart, my love, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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9 posted 2001-12-10 09:57 AM


awwwwww how sweet.......love it.  

Charisma

~*Theresia~*  

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10 posted 2001-12-11 12:48 PM


As you write each tanks, it  gets better and better.

Poetry is spiritual ventilation!

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11 posted 2001-12-11 01:10 AM


Joanna,
Aren't you too young to do this so well? Huh? Wow!  

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12 posted 2001-12-11 04:35 PM


You are learning well....nicely done RP..
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13 posted 2001-12-11 04:40 PM



I know someone who will truly treasure this one, as I do, and I shall whisk her in soon to see it for herself!

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14 posted 2001-12-11 07:50 PM


Elegant in it's simplicity! Well done!

Kathleen (Kay)
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Laurie Lee

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15 posted 2001-12-11 07:57 PM


Thank You dear friends! Your comments made my day! I learned how to write tanka's from Noah, my mistletoe Angel!

RP

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16 posted 2001-12-11 11:37 PM


Yes, this is very good.  Enjoyed very much.
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17 posted 2001-12-19 03:38 PM


This is a beautiful Tanka RosePetal.   Well done. *s*

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

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18 posted 2001-12-19 07:57 PM


Great job.
Bill Charles
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19 posted 2001-12-19 09:34 PM


RosePetal - may I borrow some words from you? These are most beautiful...

BC

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20 posted 2001-12-19 10:02 PM


Very beautiful poem you have here Joanna!  Short, sweet and romantic.  I love it, your words speak woth love and tenderness!

    Your friend
       Randy Meador

a life lived unexplored is a life not worth living.

RosePetal
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21 posted 2001-12-19 10:14 PM


Thanks again all!
Bill: Hi sweetie, I'll lend you whatever you desire dear friend. E mail me anytime

Randy: you are so very sweet and caring. Keep those poems of yours coming because I love them.

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