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D.Lester Young
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since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219
Austin, Tx

0 posted 2001-12-08 08:32 PM


Let us write powerfully but with a greater mystery in it.


Oh truly blessed child
How come I cannot mold you?
For as I teach others
You are always questioning

Oh the pain you create in me
For I see myself being molded
To have been conformed
To what others wanted

Oh truly blessed child
Quit being difficult with me
For even as I cry inside
I must change your direction

For what was taught me
Must be truly right
For me to go on the path I did
Without doubting it

Oh truly blessed child
Why do you frustrate me so?
The more I attempt to bend you
The straighter you get

As you effect me
I internally stress out
For I cannot let go
To the dimension implanted in me

Oh hell child lets go play
Let me unwind in the fun
Of us using our minds spontaneously
Creating our own fantasies

Oh child this was fun
But I must retire
Into the other side of the mirror
To see your image again tomorrow

D.Lester Young (11/19/01)
Tuscaloosa, AL


© Copyright 2001 David Lester Young - All Rights Reserved
LngJhnAg
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since 1999-07-23
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1 posted 2001-12-08 09:18 PM


I like the way you set this out in your composition.  It has a neat slant to it that holds the reader.  Well done.
D.Lester Young
Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219
Austin, Tx
2 posted 2001-12-08 10:32 PM


Thanks for the comment, the slant is different to the reader and the surprise is in the end. Blessings and a good week to you!
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