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Murmurings of an Unreachable Paradise
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Murmurings of an Unreachable Paradise |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever 
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The new day takes in it?s first morning breath, As the sun crests the edge of this world, The trees stretch their arms and yawn with the wind, As the morning glory?s petals unfurl, The wandering wind whispers in my ear, As I breeze through this birth of new light, Speaking softly to me, ?Know you not what?s near?? ?Before tomorrow drives away this night?? The tallgrass conducts it?s symphony, I answer in silence profound, How I long to bathe in her sympathy, But I fear I have already drowned, Now I sit at the peak of these valley walls, Above the crystal waterfalls, Strain from the pain of this life so stained, Washes away the wonder of a will retained, Leaving no care for all I?ve ever gained, or loved, beaten down by my own remains. This new soul takes in it?s first morning breath, Born upon these valley cliffs, Inside me the answer exists only not, The clouds in the sky still shift, ?I know not what is to come? I say, ?As I know only this.? ?My destiny swells from my own creation,? ?What I long for will not be unkissed,? An eagle now soars these boundless skies, While the faithful wind answers me, ?Live not your life, in that of disguise,? ?And manipulative tyranny.? ?Seek this life within yourself,? ?For I know not what is to come? ?I inquire, merely, of your inner wealth,? ?For you are the chosen one.? The vagabond air now speaks no more, Curtains of silence blanket infinite shores, I know, yet know not, what?s now in store, Clandestine before and evermore, For I am the eagle that soars. Love is God. Love is war. Love is what your life is for. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 CLAPPING WILDLY!!! BRAVO!!! Yes you are, for you are the friendly and graceful eagle that soars in the spirit of His love, crying with trills of spiritual happiness and destiny! (sigh) I love it, sweet friend! (big hugggsssss) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Joseph, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Hi E.S. I love your absolutely beautiful poem, but I would like to point out that I think your keyboard may have gone haywire and put ? all over the place. I don't think you intend them to be there, ruining that gorgeous piece of work. Another suggestion I have is that it would be easier to read if you would put in some line breaks...separate it into verses. Otherwise it is a shiningly beautiful piece.  copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
madame chipmunk.. thank you thank you.. you are correct in your assumption that i did not intend to put all those stupid little (?)'s everywhere.. it just happened when i centered it.. but it does kind of tie in well with being unable to determine what the future holds, doesn't it? and you are also quite correct about this piece needing line breaks. I agree i agree.. This poem is about 2 years old.. i dug it up from my earlier piptalk posts. I think this poem can be sculpted into something VERy beautiful.. thank you for your suggestions Love is God. Love is war. Love is what your life is for. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
You're welcome, E.S. This has the makings of a really SPECTACULAR piece...I can't wait to see the finished product...please make sure to re-post it.  copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
And the eagle is a powerful bird and the strong symbol of our nation. Great poem I enjoyed it alot. Thanks for sharing. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I like this. . .the extra "?" give it a deeper sense of questioning. . . makes it a little more urgent. . . well done. . . ------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Powerful words that touch the reader and make them ask questions. Yes, I really like this poem. **hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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