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Marble in the Sand
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Marble in the Sand |
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True Reflections Member
since 2001-12-04
Posts 143Ohio, USA 
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Walking along a deserted beach, barefoot in the sand, Struggling with life's issues, too complex to understand. Sun climbing slowly, on the horizon far away, The world just keeps on spinning, there dawns another day. Pausing for a moment, I take a seat upon the beach, A life as restless as the ocean, with the answers out of reach. Here alone with just my thoughts, direction undefined, A crossroad had been reached, in the pathways of my mind. A sparkle from the sand draws my attention down, To a rounded little piece of glass, lying upon the ground. As I reach down and pick it up, a drop of blood appears, At least this cut is visible, not a product of my fears. As I gaze upon this marble, a chip upon its face, I wonder of it's history, as we share this time and space. I pictured it once a perfect sphere, not a flaw in sight, What event had transpired, made wrong what once was right? Was he a steady shooter in a mighty marble test? Or was he just one of many, no different from the rest? When the tiny flaw was spotted, was his worth no more in doubt? When he no longer rolled with ease, was it then they cast him out? Reflecting back upon my life, I too had come from sand, And felt that I was shaped by fire into a worthy man. And how ironic here I was, chipped and flawed and lost, No longer with a value that justified the cost. I tossed the marble ahead of me to see how far it'd go, But although I threw with all my might, in the sand it wouldn't roll. I decided that it needed me to carry it for awhile, And as I touched it's smooth, round side I let slip out a smile. Roger |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
This is very well done. I like your metaphor. Joyce |
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sodpossom Senior Member
since 2001-06-15
Posts 723N.C |
Roger This was great my friend! |
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N orth Carolina Girl Senior Member
since 2001-12-04
Posts 962NC,USA |
Roger,this was great and so different from what I`m used to at Moontown.  Juanita |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very very nice Roger...guess I missed your opening post....will have to look it up. In the meantime...Welcome to Passions! ~hugs, Nancy~ "A dream is a wish your heart makes..." |
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True Reflections Member
since 2001-12-04
Posts 143Ohio, USA |
Joyce, I was actually holding a marble when it came to me. Had to re-count mine and none were lost. Stevie, Thanks. It's one of my golden oldies. Juanita, I posted this 25 times at Moontown. You didn't see it? Nancy, Bet you'll be surprised at the difference between these two poems. Thanks for responding. Roger |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hi there, I like this a lot. The ocean brings out relections on many subjects. (p.s. I have passed through moontown a few times ) Sandra |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Once again, welcome. This is such a wonderful poem. "A sparkle from the sand draws my attention down, To a rounded little piece of glass, lying upon the ground. As I reach down and pick it up, a drop of blood appears, At least this cut is visible, not a product of my fears." Only one of many pieces of this poem that kept my attention. I think I'll just save this and come back again later. It's worth more than one reading. Well done, True. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Having been through the fullers fire you have not come out flawed but one who has learned much and now it prepared to share the heart of gold that flowed out of the fullers fire. I love the vision of this poem and felt my heart go out to you that you still see flaws within yourself. **big hugs**  Let the sunset and beauty of who you really are be reflected in that small piece of marble. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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True Reflections Member
since 2001-12-04
Posts 143Ohio, USA |
Sandra, Did you change your name from Sandy because of my poem? Thank you for the welcome and I hope my future posts don't freak you out to badly. Midnitesun, As my favorite person ever, from Alaska, your opinion is better than an eskimo pie on a hot 4th of July. We walk that fine line between very creative and needs sedated. Startime, I used to be like this chipped marble in the sand, but now I'm more like a bowling ball with three holes drilled out that gets hurled down the lane and propelled back through a ball return to do it again. Thanks for your friendship. Roger |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Roger darling boy, I didn't see it either at Moontown, but I'm glad I saw it now. Now come on darling boy you know that this isn't true, you're more like a beach ball, all it takes is a little.......... ummmmmmm I meant of course that you're light and easily ummmmmmmmm whooooooooopsssssssss we don't want to cause a riot with all these new people flocking to see what you do for an encore.  Wonderful writing darling boy utterly wonderful. What a lovely sight to great me this morning, you bowling along. I can see you're quite at home here already. Isn't it lovely being all back together again.    Love and warm stuff as alwaays Mushy  To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 |
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True Reflections Member
since 2001-12-04
Posts 143Ohio, USA |
Marsha, You need to be careful. I don't want these wonderful people to get the right impression of me too soon. Everybody has been real nice and I have enjoyed it so far. I haven't gotten used to the 'blink and you're two pages down' way this site moves. I have to use the search just to keep track of what I replied to. My employer is probably wondering about the sudden drop in productivity also. Roger |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Time to bump this one back up, so more people can see how to lose marbles in the sand. |
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True Reflections Member
since 2001-12-04
Posts 143Ohio, USA |
Miss Alaska, Thank you for the bump.I have 5 marbles posted so far and they seem pretty stuck in the sand so far. My potty poem went over well, but the others didn't. Things just fly on this forum. I appreciate you helping me out a bit. Roger |
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